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Temptress
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0 posted 2002-07-04 12:24 PM


I don't know if this one will make sense..it seems to wind and ramble, but I hope everyone gets the point of mentioning the money, etc..I'm not sure if I do at this point. I started and my "Missing Home" muse took me the rest of the way..perhaps she got me lost? *sigh*
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I was always a father's girl
insisting sweetly on my way around all things mischievious
remembering how, when financial times were rough
in my clueless teenaged life
the money from Dad's wallet always smelled like warm backpocket leather
And perhaps it was never the money that I needed
just that memory that stands in me now
yes
warm leather infused with paper
that I had trouble letting go of
since it was such a comfortable scent
you see
it didn't represent greed
It represented the fondness of a father's heart
for keeping, for his children
their hearts desire if he could so afford
and now he affords my hearts desire in a different way
the way he always really did
with several "I Love You"s before leaving for some new destination
with a gentle handsome smile
and a heart in his eyes so big
that the rest of the world had to move over
Yes, he can afford my heart's desire
because of a wealth of love built over so many years.
And my heart's desire is to know him
to know that he knows of my love
and for me to know that he is loved
and most of all
for him to be able to show that love in ways he never could
when I was too young to appreciate it.
So the scent of a gentleness is what I leave home with
when its time to visit and leave
a scent of love that travels back with the peace in my heart from going home
a scent of concern
and a knowledge that someone always cares
even when I think no one could.


I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

© Copyright 2002 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
Krishankins
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1 posted 2002-07-04 12:51 PM


I like this, Miss Temptress. I hope my little girl has as much admiration for me as you do for your father.
Wonderfully written.

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

Larry C
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2 posted 2002-07-04 01:56 AM


Jen,
You know this Dad understands and will always love a daddy's girl. Cool write and you might have gotten lost but your muse didn't. I like this so very much. Thanks.

Show you care to those you love...today.

mycafe
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3 posted 2002-07-04 02:40 AM


Oh Temptress, I can fully identify with your feelings here.  I remember very fondly how excited I was (as a child) when my dad took out a note from his wallet and handed it to  me.  The experience was totally refreshing and heartwarming.

so glad you shared...

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

ethome
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4 posted 2002-07-04 04:45 AM


My Daughter and I are really close so I appreciate what you're writing here....I love the reference to all the scents and how they affect you even now......I know I'd be very proud to have you as a daughter.....Nice tribute to your Dad.
Of course I'm very partial to girls as I only had the one child! She very often got at the scent in my wallet too! Still does sometimes but hey, you women are magic when it comes to that. Us Dads want to complain (mildly) as we freely give it to you.

Have a nice day!

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2002-07-04 05:56 AM


Very nice Temptress...James
Songbird
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6 posted 2002-07-04 05:30 PM


This brought tears to my eyes..you struck the note of my heart the need to feel the true love of a father. You are a fortunate lady to have felt the love of your father.
Sven
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7 posted 2002-07-05 03:42 PM


now this. . . well, this just shows how much you listen to your world. . . and to what's inside of you. . .

great work. . . very touching and heartfelt. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Mark Bohannan
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8 posted 2002-07-05 07:43 PM


Very sincere and wonderful write.  I know as a father myself, I could only hope that my child would feel this level of security and love for me.  Enjoyed much.
Ouberon
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9 posted 2002-07-15 11:35 PM


Here's a piece I understand as well. The loving, providing nature that confronts real world limitations, but triumphs always in heart even when failing in substance is a past that some but not all were fortunate enough to know. Sometimes these days, I am the one holding the wallet. It's a wonderful piece, and it makes me smile, recalling the times we've talked before and taken turns being an emotional sugardaddy to one another, handing out smiles and hugs that we've been sitting on for just such an occasion. Smile babe. My wallet's always open for you Hun.
devina
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10 posted 2002-07-15 11:38 PM


This is just what I needed tonight Jen...

missin my daddy like crazy here...only a three hour drive...but STILL!!!

You could make a damn good country song outta this one lovey...

you know I like it when I get all mush-mush on you girl!!!

take care you!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



bsquirrel
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11 posted 2002-10-24 12:01 PM


If men were allowed to cry,
this one would have me weeping.

A gentle, loving memory
that I can't get out of my head.

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