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Yougoslavia - Independence day - Poet deVine's challenge
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Yougoslavia - Independence day - Poet deVine's challenge |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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I know it's early, but at the moment I don't know yet if I will be here on the 4th of July, so I thought you wouldn't mind if I post it now. It was a challenge by Poet deVine. We had to write about freedom, not related to your own country, but to some other place or country. I choosed Yougoslavia. Yougoslavia On wings of freedom I will flow, my space is limited alas Destructed villages I see, where once true freedom was For nation wide they lived in peace, now death came in real quick The once loved neighbour, loving guy, holds in his hand a brick Because he is of different faith, but serving the same God Mind is twisted, can't think straight, hate in his eyes shines through But the only thing that's on his mind, is wishing death for you They take up arms and conquer land, wipe out the men who live there And when on freedom's wings I flow, see scattered families everywhere Because they are of different faith, but serving the same God I thought the Holocaust was over, buried after World War Two But it was there on television, clearly to see for me and you Mostly men behind wired fences, reaching out in total despair Locked up skeletons, calling out: "Hey world, why don't you care!" Because they were of different faith, but serving the same God Now peace is back again they say and bad ones are on trial But still the only thing I hear, is this big, complete denial How could it ever've gotten this far, that loved ones became the enemy On wings of freedom I still fly, but one day, will they all hate me, Because I am of different faith, not serving any God? Like scattered leaves...my words will flow [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (07-02-2002 04:18 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wonderful, Titia! The repetitive lines was nicely effective, and the ending twist "nailed" it... I admire the smooth quality here, as well as the message. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You met the challenge exactly in the way I'd hoped!! Thank you for this wonderful poem and equally wonderful lesson. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Yes, Titia, unfortunately they will  This is very powerful writing  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Titia When you go back to the Middle ages and before that's what happened, so as long as history repeats itself which is what it's doing..what you refer to will sadly continue..will we ever learn???!! Thanks for sharing [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-01-2002 09:24 PM).] |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
This is a very strong message and write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very powerful write Titia! Well done! ~Hugs~ |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Sadly enough I have to agree with you, as long as there are people, there will be fighting over religion. But then....it has nothing to do with religion you know...but everything with power...and that's such a waste of time...I think Thanks for your replies Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Titia, looks like you met the challenge very well. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ What a wonderful piece from the pages of history-in-repeat~ You are soooooooooo good !! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Tita this is a wonderfully well written poem, which touched me with it’s powerful images you are indeed a good writer I like this I wish for peace but know there is a long way to go. Well done on the challenge   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Very splendid piece well written. Yugoslavia has always been in my thoughts, and I cannot begin to comprehend the atrocities that were committed there in the name of religion. My heart goes out to these people. My grand parents were from Slovenia, which was the only part of Yugoslavia who was not involved in the wars. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Thanks to all and have a nice 4th of July.  Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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