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Open Poetry #21

Blue and Black

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

0 posted 2002-07-01 09:25 AM

the colour of a bruise.. no
the way the day flows
from the morning to night
with angel guided flight
beautiful light laughter
in the daily orbit, I'll be after
smiles never shout

remember sky blue zenith
black can't storm my play
cause I know your love

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-01-2002 09:25 AM).]

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

1 posted 2002-07-01 09:34 AM

Martin darling boy This is seriously excellent writing, the flow of this is perfect, the internal pace and the construction cannot be bettered. And the form perfect absolutely perfect.

You write divinely Martin my dear friend absolutely perfect I love it

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

2 posted 2002-07-01 09:40 AM

very good poem - I enjoyed it - Paul

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

3 posted 2002-07-01 08:16 PM

Marsha

I would have thought it could be extended but I'll keep it as is

Paul,

Thanks for sharing..amazing what colors can tell us.

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