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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-06-30 01:11 PM

Meter,Schmeter....OK?

Lady, wilt thee still have thy knight
in armor dented and unclean?
Can thy heart still carry love of me
in spite of this dull sheen?

My soul carries a burden of a hundred
stones of great size and weight.
Doth thee still love, still live of me?

Whence thy mind found my heart.
Whence thy soul became of me.
‘Pon the mome, ‘pon the start
Doth thee still, of now, love me?

A life of plunder, of wickedness.
A life of sinfulness and shame.
A soul so tattered in duress.
Wilt thy love of me remain?

Give me thy hand, that I might shed
a tear from my soul into thy palm.
Whisper thy words, clear my dread.
Comfort me now, keep me warm..

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-06-30 01:18 PM

Barry you know I love this!
Perhaps your best?

You may weep into my palm any day sire.
Whilst this wench polishes thine armor.
Well done!
~Hugs & Sighs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

J. K. Mitchell
Member

since 2002-01-12

Posts 311
GA

2 posted 2002-06-30 01:28 PM

This is moving and powerful.
Brilliant as usual.

"The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2002-06-30 01:39 PM

Well if she won't, I will.
Methinks the knight in you showeth well.
Sandra

cherrypoptart
Member

since 2002-06-09

Posts 109
state of wordthiness

4 posted 2002-06-30 01:41 PM

Very very well written.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2002-06-30 02:07 PM

Magnus,
What can I say after the above? Well done.

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

6 posted 2002-06-30 03:11 PM

I wrote something of the same subject it seems so long ago.

It had two parts, and it didn't have this language. *sigh* Anyway..I did love this, and anyone in their right minds would love that Knight no matter what his past.

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

7 posted 2002-06-30 06:59 PM

Magnus darling boy this is utterly utterly perfect, what can I say that I haven’t said before? There’s nothing I shall simply have to come up with new superlatives, and they aren’t just lying around anywhere you know? Good superlatives are a buyers market, unless you’ll make do with the fake ones, they look okay it’s only when you rub them the gilt comes off. So don’t rub them darling boy

Absolutely wonderful darling I love this one, tell the Knight I’ll meet him round by the bike sheds in half an hour, and I’ll bring a can opener. I know frightfully irreverent aren’t I You did say the armour was a little bashed up, I’m just ensuring that we don’t run into any difficulties

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2002-06-30 07:15 PM

Barry~

I love reading your words! this is exceptional...

Lauren~

Emeralds from mountains
thrust towards the sky
Never revealing their depth

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2002-06-30 07:22 PM

Give me thy hand, that I might shed
a tear from my soul into thy palm.
Whisper thy words, clear my dread.
Comfort me now, keep me warm..

Need thy beseech this soul's mate?
My love, thine heart, is thy gate
to enter in, to keep thee warm
as thee has kept me save from harm...

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

10 posted 2002-06-30 08:12 PM

How very sweet, how could she resist?

Cor

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

11 posted 2002-06-30 08:16 PM

a great write Barry - fun to read and lots to say - thanks Paul

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

12 posted 2002-06-30 08:16 PM

You are inspiring here Barry!!!

I love the olden language and these poems just stick to you!!!

this is me *approving*

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

13 posted 2002-06-30 08:25 PM

Hello Barry

You are a knight in shining armour to many people here and I'm one of your biggest fans. This was wonderful.

Take care.....Sue

Suetang

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

14 posted 2002-07-01 09:10 PM

Magnus...this is just beautiful...it made me cry...what outpouring of "real" love...ok, ok, ok you touched me...who could not respond to a man who pulls out his soul and heart and hands it to you? and ...who among us IS perfect? helen

Lady Ollyne
Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 337
East Coast

15 posted 2002-07-01 09:18 PM

Take mine hand
and I shall grant thee
Comfort

Lady Ollyne Awaits Thee

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

16 posted 2002-07-01 10:34 PM

Helen...dear lady, forgive me for making
you cry...Surely not my desire...

I am just letting a part of me out...humbling
myself with my soul's words...
To each of you, so many names... so many
individual thoughts and feelings...Thanx
much...This has been an emotional roller
coaster of a week...

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

17 posted 2002-07-01 10:45 PM

keep writing like this and you can make me cry any day

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