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Keith Morgan
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since 2001-10-29

Posts 114
Md

0 posted 2002-04-19 12:53 PM

The Unforgiven

I stand on the highest mountain
Overlooking the vast spectrum of life
With the wind navigating my thoughts

Pondering and observing
Decisions soon to be made
Watering orbs of prediction
As an enemy placates me
Offerings of treasures and truths

While the sun shines upon the children
Casting light upon their pitiful souls
As flesh and consciousness
Succumb to the shadows of evil
I listen to crying hearts
Splashing tears…blood red…dropping
Into the bottomless abyss of sorrow

Naked and ashamed
Wandering through the wilderness
Lost without guidance
Blind pawns of the past
Players in the game of “Fate”

They reach out
In hopes of a Savior’s hands
Only to find a cold breeze
And the silence of time

But as darkness settles
Cries turn into cheers
Pain into pleasure
Tears drying
Becoming dust
In the desert of “Revelations”

With the sun at my back
And the shadows preceding me
I am drawn into the darkness
As I make that slow walk
Into the valley of “Sin”

Marcel

Write from the soul and the words will flow

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

1 posted 2002-04-19 06:35 AM

I felt the darkness settling in as I read, enveloping me in the deepness of your thoughts here......very intense, and extremely well written.....much enjoyed
The music is playing...it's your time to dance!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2002-04-19 04:16 PM

Interesting! A page from the prophecies, through a personal view. Vividly portrayed.

I enjoyed.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2002-04-19 04:26 PM

Keith~

This is indeed very well written, with uderlying meaning....I love the last stanza,
nicely done...

Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows of my heart

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2002-04-19 04:51 PM

I will only say that I agree with all of
the other comments...very well written and
so descriptive...

Canuckster
Member

since 2002-01-09

Posts 285
New Mexico, USA

5 posted 2002-04-19 05:21 PM

The Temptation of Christ comes through very clearly to me and demonstrates the humanity present in a way that makes it more real.

Very stirring piece.

Bart

Keith Morgan
Member

since 2001-10-29

Posts 114
Md

6 posted 2002-04-20 12:44 PM

Thank you, Bart for your understanding. Not trying to compare with the almighty, just trying to show how weak we are as humans.

Write from the soul and the words will flow

Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

7 posted 2002-04-20 12:50 PM

wow..feels like something swallowed me. enjoyed!

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

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