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Open Poetry #20

One More ...

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

0 posted 2002-05-24 12:20 PM

One more day
one more tomorrow
just to remember
yesterday's sorrow

one more laugh
and another cry
take one more
deep breath

give it
one more try

one more step

one back ...
... or ahead?
followed by
one more
that makes two
instead

one more dream
one more fantasy
one more wish
before
one more
bites reality

create an addiction .... share a smile!!

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

1 posted 2002-05-24 12:52 PM

This is a wonderful usage of repetition for power. Fantastic poem.

Nan

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

2 posted 2002-05-25 08:24 AM

Craig~

very lovely.....almost in a sad way though..be well you...HUGSSSS

Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2002-05-25 08:45 AM

Craig, we all experience this balance of
maybes and what is.....our dreams and our
realities.... Like how you have done this.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2002-05-25 08:50 AM

True enough! Well said, that's how one tends to see things.
Good write!

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2002-05-25 08:50 AM

ctowen
Well done enjoyed the read.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

6 posted 2002-05-25 09:39 AM

Good write, Craig. Nice to read you again.
Sandra

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

7 posted 2002-05-26 12:48 PM

Such soft sadness Craig. Lot of that going around these days.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2002-05-27 12:55 PM

One more time, I came back to read this one more time, and noticed I hadn't replied the first time. So one more time, I'll say, you write emotional moments so well, they are always believable.

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