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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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symbiotic opening descent of language confines in memory loss is unknown departure only exists a walk by the hand toward the spheres no sadness in mourning shadows reveal knowledge only known quite soon consciousness expands until unity is designed light radiates dimensionally leading spirit questions find answers answers find morning transference crosses eternity evolves flowing freely desining days in sky ------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Sven Hi there this is a very well written poem the structure and flow is excellent. The content is amazing. I like this a lot. You are a very very good writer.   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
WOW!  What a work to wake up to in the afternoon. Love this, Sven Pen. I can see you growing to it seems. How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Sven, Walking toward the spheres. What a nice way to think of it. Nan |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
symbiotic opening descent of language confines in memory loss is unknown departure only exists a walk by the hand toward the spheres no sadness in mourning ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Beautiful Sven... Enjoyed this write so much... on this beautiful Spring day... ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
John, I like this, but would you tell me what is the true subject, as I am not sure.I know I am seeing the sad side of things lately, so just want to validate my thoughts here. Thanks Sandra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Deep into the depths of the poetic mind you take us on this journey! Well done Sir! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Yes, yes, it is our consciences that help develop a beautiful day from a hazy morning, and if we can all just develop ourselves, our hearts are bound to soak up the sun always! (big hugggsssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thank you all my friends. . . this piece came from nowhere. . .perhaps, I should listen to the voices more often. . . and Sandra, it's about. . . life. . .and death. . .and mornings. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
still loving this! How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so. ~Sarah MacLachlan~ [This message has been edited by Temptress (04-13-2002 02:32 AM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
wow sven~ those voices would be your muse speaking to you... this is just fantastic, I call my muse my rambles...LOL (I tend to ramble though so) I am in awe of this...A keeper...  Lauren~ Step through the |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is very well done, Sven. When I read it I thought of a story I read once, about a woman whose son had died. She woke up early in the morning and was thinking of him and said that was when she realized why dawn was called morning. Thank you.  skyI'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
departure only exists a walk by the hand toward the spheres no sadness in mourning Enjoyed those lines especially. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
....and that's life! I love it. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thank you all my friends. . . this one I like. . .it's become a favorite of mine. . . and yes, perhaps it is my muse that speaks in this voice. . . note: could I please have a Moderator add a "g" to the word "designing" in the last line??? thanks!! ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Nicely done here, Sven. For a minute I thought you'd written this about the funeral this weekend, but then I saw you wrote it last week. I like it very much and I think it puts things into perspective perfectly. All writing comes |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
John, I like the layers in this piece. Well done. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, shadows do reveal knowledge, don't they? and so does Sven  |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
John, I very much enjoyed this.....great write. Take Care, ~Laura~ |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
John, I very much enjoyed this.....great write. Take Care, ~Laura~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thank you all very much. . . this one seems to have taken on a life of its own. . . perhaps that means something. . . thank you all again. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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