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Deep Within [revised, from #3]
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Deep Within [revised, from #3] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Deep Within Deep within the soul the silent longing is there, painfully, woefully stubborn, making it hard to breathe even to take a deep breath. A sensation of “reaching” there, down deep, holding on to the mind’s most fleeting thought, discarding even love, for a brief answer to sweet agony. How best to resolve this indisputable emotion, that which centers itself into a pit of desire, not for love itself, but for a brief sharing of bidding one's self well. I know the answer, for it has always been within me, but there are times where I fail to impart a sense of urgency, and the failure pains me. It is somewhat like that faint, lonesome strain of one violin, sweet, pure, fine, a lingering note, reaching out for one other to hear, understand, knowing its beauty in its loneliness. To share so much so that another is touched by the rare beauty of tender words, this lingering feeling still doesn’t let me breathe. ~*~ ©KRJ 9 October, 1999 revised 7 May 2002 [This message has been edited by Sunshine (05-07-2002 09:25 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
...and this poem leaves me breathless, as well... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Indeed a very beautiful and deep meaningful write. Well done karilea!! Like a red brick, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
One, Two, Three..... Now breathe.... simply divine....such beauty and desire penned upon a page... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Karilea, this write is extremely well done. Stunning in presentation as well.... like a tear gently falling down the page. Love this one. ~Hugs~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) This is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! (smiles) I am delighted you revised this and re-posted this so I can see it, sweet friend, this is a true tear of heartfelt sentiments and value, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yes...I understand this. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
faint, lonesome strain of one violin, sweet, pure, fine, a lingering note, reaching out for one other to hear, understand, knowing its beauty in its loneliness." Karilea~ What a striking image that is.....this poem lingers....it resonates in my mind. *hugs* ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
It is somewhat like that faint, lonesome strain of one violin, sweet, pure, fine, a lingering note, reaching out for one other to hear, understand, knowing its beauty in its loneliness. I absolutely love this, Karilea ~a sweet lingering hugLyra |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I know this only too well, and Enchantress said it best, "a tear dripping down a page". Poignant. ~* ~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Sunshiny girl This is a fabulous write, I enjoyed reading this very much....breathtaking write, thanks for sharing ~HUGS~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (05-08-2002 04:17 AM).] |
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