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the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

0 posted 2003-02-28 03:26 PM

I am jealous of the rain
And the way it falls
Down your neck
I am jealous of the rain

I am jealous of the moon
The way it stares
And looks out for you
And lights your way
In the dark night
I am jealous of the moon

I am jealous of the sun
The way it keeps you warm
On a cold day
I am jealous of the sun

I am an jealous of the sun
Moon
And Rain
Because I want to share you
With nothing else
I want to be able to do those things
And make you happy
For eternity

Jealous

Cold hands means a warm heart

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2003-02-28 03:36 PM

Julie~
This is just an awesome thought ...

'I am jealous of the rain
And the way it falls
Down your neck'

What a neat idea ... wish I'd a 'thunk of it first~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-02-28 03:39 PM

Thank you Marge. With Liam so far away I think of stuff like this. Just flows from what I am thinking about.

Cold hands means a warm heart

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

3 posted 2003-02-28 03:40 PM

very creative thoughts,

BlueEyes
Member

since 2002-08-30

Posts 152
TX, USA

4 posted 2003-02-28 03:42 PM

Julie - this is so beautiful.... you have come such a long way in your writing!

Great job!!

BlueEyes

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-02-28 03:43 PM

Thank you inkedgoddess. I do try to be creative when I can. But sometimes it is hard.

Cold hands means a warm heart

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-02-28 03:44 PM

Thanks BlueEyes. I am trying to change my style a bit. I am just glad everybody likes the change.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2003-02-28 03:50 PM

Julie, YOU are making ME jealous, with your
wonderful poem! Some very creative thinking going on here!

Warm hugs,
Linda

ThunderMage
Senior Member

since 2002-06-20

Posts 812
Canada

8 posted 2003-02-28 11:24 PM

You already do all that for me Julie.

What is life without poetry and adventure?
"Little sister" is just another way of saying "Guardian Angel"!
We do not stop playing because we grow ol

ben_pelling
Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 59
Isle of Wight UK.

9 posted 2003-02-28 11:26 PM

very creative it diffinitly made me think =)

rkcraig
Member

since 2003-02-27

Posts 202
Cincinnati, Ohio, USA

10 posted 2003-02-28 11:32 PM

creative and well rounded poem. Love the comparissons and good transitions.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2003-03-01 04:19 PM

oh Julie! This is so wonderful! You've come far!

Amara
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 158
East of the moon, west of the sun.

12 posted 2003-03-01 04:20 PM

I like this...jealous of the world for being what you can't...interesting concept, and beautiful, too!

That's what we, as heroes, do. We live as if the world were like it should be, to show the world what it could be.

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