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about a match |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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she had furiously swept aside any ambitions he had as the red day turned grey first and then black as night dropped itself behind heavy curtains draped in dark clouds blanketing the stars he was left grasping cold rails dressed in isolation wondering why, where and how had it all gone wrong if only he had understood what his mother meant when she had said "son, don’t play with fire you might get your fingers burnt and your heart scarred" well, then he was just six and only playing with a modest match now he was twenty six and only playing for his own life match if only he had known he was flirting with fire |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
This is the first I have read from you and I have to say I like it alot. Very well done! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Sudhir, this is so very sad but true, sweet friend, you can't play with matches or ther emay be no more flame to go around and with the fire out that one chance for happiness might be delayed! (sad sigh) This is well-said, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
You always thrill me with your perspective and word-weaving. I really like: he was left grasping cold rails dressed in isolation wondering why, where and how had it all gone wrong Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Good write, enjoyed the read. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a very good poem...lots of meaning and thoughts to it...  . . Hugs, Ethel |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
 nice writedeep and interesting Thomas |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Sudhir...like the story like feeling to this..yes, feel like more! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
LOVE THIS! Wonderful..love the ending! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wow, this is intense, Sudhir! Very well written! Core |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sudhir I know but I at times can't stop myself from playing...James |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
If people want to play with fire, I suppose they should wear asbestos gloves!---or wear a vestment of asbestos around their heart... Our mothers were right! Warm hugs, EA |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Excellent Sudhir!! Enjoyed much. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all my very dear friends for your words of support and appreciation... regards sudhir |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It's hard to pull yourself away from the warmth that you desire once you get a feel for the fire. I felt the chill in your words and I'm sorry. It's good to read you sudhir~ Take care. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the new picture! very handsome  |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
good write >>phantom poet<< |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sudhir - amazing - your words are but the truth - this is excellent xxoo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
enjoyed this... and certainly have enjoyed reading you over time... you did this well.. very well |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Much enjoyed Sudhir! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you dear friends, very much, for your kind visit and wonderful responses... Regards, Sudhir |
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