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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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her diseased mind refused to let her acknowledge this was a Sunday afternoon she stood by the phone, her wrinkled fingers persistently pressing those darned numbers, obstinate in reaching a response i wanted her to tell her to let it go, that i love her, will earn her losses back some day and dissolve her pain with a long satisfying hug i tore up the namecard of the con man instead, probably helping to induce another of her relapses [This message has been edited by kaile (02-24-2003 09:38 PM).] |
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Darksoul Member
since 2003-01-31
Posts 61 |
I like this one alot! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kaile, I wonder if this is in reference to one of your other poems. Not sure I understand the title, but liked the ideas in this. Compassion and understanding shown. Very interesting. If you answer I might be off-line, but will get back to you eventually. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the ending, it made me think |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
i wanted her to tell her to let it go, that i love her and will earn her losses back some day and dissolve her pain with a long satisfying hug i tore up the namecard of the con man instead, probably helping to induce another of her relapses the inner thoughts and outer actions..in conflict with purpose and unsure of direction that should best be... captured well here.. captured well.. I enjoyed |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It is amazing [on my read of this] how victimized our elderly people come to be... and if there ever was a law, it should be in protecting them, and their remaining financial reserves... |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Pat, indeed this is kinda a sequel to "While i am sleeping", currently languishing somewhere in the back pages of Open #25... i believe Ron has stated my intentions better than I can and that Karilea has read this "correctly" sorry for this substandard piece though...this feels greatly unfinished to me...thanks for reading it anyway..perhaps it's a piece that isn't meant to be written out loud? (note the excuse i'm giving myself)  thanks for paying attention and i'll give this another go... |
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