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Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

0 posted 2003-02-15 12:30 PM

I danced with a reason
For living tonite
I was tired
Worked all day
Was trying hard to look forward to it
I came home, opened the door
And God...she was stunning
Just like her mother
And when I told her how
Beautiful she looked
Her shy smile,and the pure
Proud joy,at my simple words
Made my day so small
And me her world and I
Was filled with worth and love

And we danced all night
Clumsy and not caring
In her beautiful gown
With her laughing friends
All angels
And we laughed and did the
Chicken dance,the YMCA
And lined danced like fools
And all of the dads
Forgot to look sheepish
And I glimpsed for an instant
The woman she was becoming
So soon
And I knew,I was the first man
She loved
I will never forget
That night I danced
With an angel

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2003-02-15 01:23 AM

This reminds me of the man who taught me how to dance, my Father who counted the steps, and carved out a time I will never forget.

Thanks for this~

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-15-2003 02:02 AM).]

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

2 posted 2003-02-15 02:50 AM

What a wonderful memory you have here, and am so glad that you decided to share it with us. I never knew my father, but always wanted to share something like this with him. Your daughter is very lucky that you care, and I hope you show her this one, as it will make her even more proud.

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~

[This message has been edited by Sunnyone (02-15-2003 02:51 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-02-15 03:35 AM

that's special

sellout007
Member

since 2003-02-14

Posts 108
Suburbs of Chicago, IL

4 posted 2003-02-15 02:25 PM

What a wonderful special time with her!

A dream is but a dream, you can wake up. Reality is ultimate, and those who share it with us are far more important than anything we could remember,

[This message has been edited by sellout007 (02-15-2003 05:33 PM).]

SPIRIT
Senior Member

since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

5 posted 2003-02-21 01:01 PM

Lucky daughter, lucky you.

Shlee
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 72
USA

6 posted 2003-02-21 07:00 PM

This is wonderful. I really loved reading this. It brings memories and thoughts of being with my father. Thank you so much. This really touched my heart. I'm so glad you have memories like this

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2003-02-21 08:39 PM

Jason, I'm so glad that someone bumped this back up, This is so touching and beautiful. I liked it being from a Father's point of view...I know your daughter will cherish this....

Hugs,
Ethel

Albert J. Allie
Senior Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 512
Queens NY

8 posted 2003-02-21 09:19 PM

I liked this. I did I did!!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2003-02-21 09:27 PM

For several unutterable reasons...
this poem is a

!

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

10 posted 2003-02-21 10:02 PM

Thank you all for the kind words,my first attempt at a write like this, and truly a night I will always cherish.
Jason

poohbear19
Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 94
Colorado, USA

11 posted 2003-02-21 10:14 PM

good poem, nicely written. i have never known my dad so i will never get to experience a father daughter dance.

Andrea

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

12 posted 2003-02-21 10:27 PM

Just one question...
Why is this unforgettable, beautiful piece
not a book submission?
This brought back a flood of memories.
Exquisite beyond compare.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2003-02-21 10:44 PM

I'm with Sunshine.. definately a keeper

adding to my library.

Maree.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

14 posted 2003-02-21 11:00 PM

(big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, you truly are a golden-hearted father and friend and I know your daughter will always love you and her golden heart will grow with dance too! (sigh) This is very special, sweet friend, I send many angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jason, thank you for sharing!

May love and light awlays shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2003-03-04 04:13 PM

Very nice...sounds like fun...James

Ringo

Member Elite

since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

16 posted 2003-03-04 04:28 PM

Jason,
Brother, I haven't cried since I was 15 except for a few brief seconds at my father's funeral... this one got me too close for comfort, because I could see and feel my own daughter as I danced with her on my toes when she was a child. This one deserves to be in the book.

BlueEyes
Member

since 2002-08-30

Posts 152
TX, USA

17 posted 2003-03-04 04:43 PM

into the library!

Beautiful, wonderful read...

BlueEyes

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

18 posted 2003-03-04 05:00 PM

Thank you, nice words for what was my first non metrical piece.
Jason

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

19 posted 2003-03-04 05:52 PM

Dance with my daughter....a wonderful read and wonderful thought

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

20 posted 2003-03-04 06:33 PM

this one goes to my library...
reminds me how much I love my dad.
..I wish we could dance together.. but we're making it through the fight and dances of living.
so beautiful.. *sigh*
thank you

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

21 posted 2003-03-04 06:49 PM

Lucky man, beautiful write.

My daughter's won't dance with me... said something about a rythimless white man getting electrocuted... or something like that..

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

22 posted 2003-03-04 07:56 PM

Lol, And to your library the highest compliment of all, and dread the day I know is coming............the day I am too old.
Jason

carol
Senior Member

since 2003-01-25

Posts 624
Florida USA

23 posted 2003-03-04 08:54 PM

Jason Lyle,I really liked this it made think of the times my daddy and I danced together even after I was grown I really loved it

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

24 posted 2003-03-04 10:08 PM

Sweet words sorry I came to the dance late..traffic?

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

25 posted 2003-03-04 10:22 PM

Jason - this is simply beautiful. Thanks for the memories. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

26 posted 2003-03-05 08:54 AM

This is heartwarming and absolutely beautiful... and fills me with envy. *S* Wonderful work!!!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

27 posted 2003-03-05 11:58 AM

OK, so my only problem with this?
the lack of the book submit option....
I'll put it into my private library for safe keeping anyway.
Lucky daughter! Lucky father! Lucky us to be part of this dance!

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

28 posted 2003-03-06 01:09 PM

What good friends I find here, after several suggestions I submitted this.I had hesitated both because this was a new kind of write for me, and because I have 2 other submissions and worried about diluted votes.But when thinking, nothing would make me happier than to give this in print to my daughter( of which I have two ).Thank you friends, I was both delighted and suprised at how this piece was recieved.
Jason

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