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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Among hues of auburn lying apathetic before her There she stood Proud and mystic Glimpsing to the West the Evergreen greets the twilight with sadness As the dying sun sets upon her beauty for one last time She is greeted by Autumn as the fierce wind attacks Attempting to budge her precious limbs Its futile attempts only cause the leaves to stir and they respond with animosity Yet, the wind continues! Tearing away limbs from the mighty Oak, The Elm, The Maple The trees cry out dissent towards the evergreen While the wind whistles throughout the rustic terrain For all to hear and judge . . . And she silently wonders why she has been placed within the company of so many enemies (This is more a story of sorts . . . the coming of winter and a fresh start . . .) [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-07-2003 02:13 PM).] |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
great imagery, I can hear the wind whistling and feel it gusting on my skin |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
YES! You put me right outside of myself with this one. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You can take me away with your words anytime! I will most definitely enjoy the trip---as I did this one! Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
fantastic images Sue, paints a picture |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you everyone - I dont like em this long - but it is sort of a picture - a story - so I couldnt cut it short - thanks for reading - xxoo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Among hues of auburn lying apathetic before her There she stood ========================== what a very cool opening verse....(and title) superb imagery in this lw... Im loving your poetry.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
pretty good...real good |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
hehehe shadows - can always count on you , my friend - TY |
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