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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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right and wrong breed trouble and air empty of your voice stings with the force of a hammer hitting the top of a pin balanced on concrete. People worry when I get sad, but they shouldn't. After all what use have I for a blade when your silence and the sound of you turning your back to me are enough to carve rivers of doubt in the flesh of hope? SARCASM BREEDS A BROKEN HEART, and I have enough cracks. Please stop breaking me! |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
This is so heart wrenching. I rather have someone yell at me its the silence that kills because usually silence means they don't care anymore. |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Perhaps, in stepping out of the circle, we find what makes it go around, so that it stops. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
and the sound of you turning your back to me are enough to carve rivers of doubt in the flesh of hope? loved this. lots of love, gemma xxxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
This is incredible. One of the most powerful images I've read in a while. It's really superb. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
So sad, but so real. I could literally feel the emotions in this one. You are very good at putting your true feelings on paper.  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
Enjoyed your write!! and thoughts!! >>phantom poet<< |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"what use have I for a blade when your silence and the sound of you turning your back to me are enough to carve rivers of doubt" woman...you ARE a poet...your words are so touching...and at times my sweet mississippi water...we have to drink the mud...wink...helen |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
the title caught my eye and your closing lines were simply delightful |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
How can we know the warmth of acceptance if we never experience rejection or the joy of love if we never felt heartbreak? One can only hope that the balance tips in favor of love and acceptance... beautifully expressed emotions in this poem though they be sad ones  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
powerful insight into the sharp edges of silence.. very well done... leaves the reader bleeding as they remember their own experiences... |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Going in circles... I understand... I suspect we all do... Well said, Jenn...  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Silence can be deafening--and deadly! Great write!...I'm still reeling from the effects of your words! Warm morning hugs, Earth Angel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Morning Jenn....powerful words here. Much enjoyed the read. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Temptress Ow, a lash from the cat of nine tails. Good write. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very intense writing I,too, loved gemma's quote A superb poem! Congratulations on this fine piece! Liz |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
The words speak power and pain like poems themselves smoking in circles and circles and circles and circles. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggssssssss) I too would take the verbal sledgehammer over the silence myself, at least in silence you know one is listening and is there, but in silence it's a ghost town! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, swet Jennifer, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is so sad...pulled the heartstrings |
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