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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{"Give me your morning, before golden fingers play above and below the horizon" L~} ~~ There I was, but the landscape different he lead me softly, where all fantasy’s are built touched gently of my dreams from night Curiosity blue met my eyes he drew me down placed me on silk reason showing me how hearts beat pressing liquid lips Beneath clouds the wind fell asleep giving way to deeper oceans Sketch me above mountains in crimson splendor If only I could sleep -- inside of you, in that bed of orchid kaleidoscope echoing endless green t o n i g h t ~~~~~ Take me where the tides start So I can pull you into me [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-02-2003 07:21 PM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Like a thief so very beautiful.... L~ lovely words, lovely you.......   sister of  I must have had my momma's will |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
" There I was, but the landscape different he lead me softly, where all fantasy’s are built touched gently of my dreams from night Curiosity blue met my eyes he drew me down placed me on silk reason showing me how hearts beat" ========================================== Oh my...oh my...oh my. Is it okay for my muse to come visit you for lessons? This is amazing...you are amazing..I am speechless.. and want to throw my pens away! ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
More gift, then theft, this is. Daamn! Ed "The shortest distance between two points is.....sometimes intolerable" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren...I think you could seduce the air with your words....to become sunset infused in the middle of the day. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
One of your best...James |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay! Oh Lauren, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, I just love the kaleidoscope imagery you paint, I bet you would also make a beautiful painter, yay! (kiss on cheek) This is precious, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Beneath clouds the wind fell asleep giving way to deeper oceans You write the essence of romance, and complete the phrase. Lovely work Lauren~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
cold showers... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lauren - this is beautiful! Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Curiosity blue met my eyes he drew me down placed me on silk reason showing me how hearts beat pressing liquid lips Beneath clouds the wind fell asleep giving way to deeper oceans Sketch me above mountains in crimson splendor If only I could sleep -- inside of you, in that bed of orchid kaleidoscope echoing endless green ================================ I sent this thread to another poet from here so she wouldnt miss it..with a note that said.. "I want to write like this when I grow up" she wrote back "Me TOO!!!" Does that give an idea of how uniquely awesome your poetry is? the colors and images in this are stunning poetess L~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Yes! That is exactly what I want!! Beautiful! Susan |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Thank you. Thanks for posting a fine poem, and even more, thanks for a lesson in how to write poetry. This piece should be required reading for everybody in PIP. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I tend to agree with both Martie and Janet Marie, Lauren. Simply lovely, my friend, on of your best. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very beautiful write |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
can't add much to what has been said already here... but do enjoy the style and form..that leaves an open feel to even weighty words... absolutely wonderful write... |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Indeed, be still my foolish heart. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you for such heart felt comments....I do so appreciate your time....MUWWWAAAHHHHSSSS and HUGSSSSS Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
Really a enjoy!! >>phantom poet<< |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lauren, Not only remarkable, but rare. Such talent you have. Very beautiful indeed. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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