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After You Are Gone....
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After You Are Gone.... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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I thought about you last night. I can’t forget the sound of the click. It wasn’t the door closing shut. It was your heart.. I can’t forget the look in your eyes. I looked into them....and I saw it. Something that I had feared, still do. I saw nothing....no emotion at all. Couldn’t you see my own eyes? The sadness, emptiness, loneliness. The despair of knowing that it is... It is...finally...over.. I sit by the phone...silence chilling I check my email...no new messages The red light on my comp...are you there? The unanswered pleas, not heard. Can it truly be the end, the final moment? When a heart, once strong...stops.. When gray of night covers a lover’s moon? When no shadow walks beside again. The walks on the beach, holding hands. Kisses, more kisses, passionate embraces. Hot flames burning between us, now cold. Our tide now out, a bare ground before me. You are my eternal love, my devotion. I shall carry you, your memory always. I shall not cry, for I know you are safe... No anger will cross my lips.. Goodbye my love, for I have a memory I have cherished moments, words...letters. I have all of this and so much more... For...even after I am gone...you have my heart... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well this reaches out and tugs hard...so I must still have my heart, for I felt it break... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Magnus, that first stanza is so touching, it grabs the reader into the poem which continues to be powerful, yet soft, heartfelt and bittersweet. I love this. floria Floria |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Gosh...come on Karilea...put it back together for the next time...Sorry, my muse is still on vacation...can't rhyme well....soooo, I do this... Thank You! |
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brianbeaudry Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 410Northern Ontario Canada |
Heartwrenching post Magnus.....sadness and longing penned in every line...agony scribed in every verse!!!! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
We tend to look back on such moments, such thoughts when we may find ourselves lost to Love's possibilities. In a word, each thought, each line, ... such love ... can only be "endless". |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy this is a heart wrenchingly ache, not bitter, not cruel but that feeling you have when you give someone your heart and they don’t cherish it. You write beautifully as always the flow is divine and the structure is flawless, I doubt if you could write a bad poem if you tried. Fabulous darling boy utterly utterly fabulous.  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh gawd Barry! Pull yourself together...you'll be okay...and besides, it's just a poem, right? I sure hope so! In fact I know so! I like to write like this at times..well, most of the time..I enjoy challenging my mind. LOL...  Good write my friend, Hugs, Nancy. ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
wonderful..I have felt this more than once this year.. Can it truly be the end, the final moment? When a heart, once strong...stops.. When gray of night covers a lover’s moon? When no shadow walks beside again nicely done, Magnus ~A~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lots of feelings and emotions...James |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Shoot....Oh my gosh...such sadness flows in these words....**big big hugs** take care, my friend... Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
It wasn’t the door closing shut. It was your heart.. Magnus - Dear Sir you had me hook, line and sinker with these few words. Amazing poetry here. Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Mangus I feel that you have captured all of the heartache, pain, and emptiness in your words. Many of us have felt this pain, it is very hard to put this pain into words and you have done just that. Bravo! Excellent write - one for my library. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Magnus, I've never been glad that a muse takes a holiday but I am glad yours did, even though your write wrenched my heart and grieved my soul. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I must say, Barry...that I really like this new muse of yours. You write beautiful and heart rending free verse. Can it truly be the end, the final moment? When a heart, once strong...stops.. When gray of night covers a lover’s moon? When no shadow walks beside again. this is exactly how I felt after my first husband's death. thanks for sharing. copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Barry, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to you and your sorrow and I pray that this is not a feeling that applies to you recently! (big hugggsssss) This is such a tearjerker, sweet friend, we all love you so much, all our thoughts are with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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