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Honeybee
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0 posted 2002-03-06 10:17 PM

Tropical Punch
Sunrise/Sunset

Dawn sips sparrow's tang
dining on heaven's truffles
sun smiles in topaz
kissing the creamsicle clouds
of tawny suede horizon

Sun sets to damask
seafoam skylight curtain falls
onyx takes the stage
sienna stars scintillate
for the misty mocha moon

By Melissa P. Monette

SEA

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with you

1 posted 2002-03-06 10:20 PM

stunning Melissa!

Silver Streak
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since 2002-01-02

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2 posted 2002-03-06 10:23 PM

Very nice, Melissa!

((Melissa))
-newell

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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3 posted 2002-03-06 10:25 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, your beautiful visions always make me sigh and the imagery and paint you color dreams with! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is majestic! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23

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Kansas USA

4 posted 2002-03-06 11:08 PM

Wow! What poetic imagery! This is spellbinding!

Shenachie

rosepetals25

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5 posted 2002-03-06 11:49 PM

Melissa,

One of my favorite forms of poetry by one of my favorite poets. Of course I love it

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Masked Intruder

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Near golden sunsets

6 posted 2002-03-07 01:25 AM

Amazing illusions! Perfect word choice, excellent form! I think you've got it. *grins*

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2002-03-07 05:57 AM

IWIHWT

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2002-03-07 08:33 AM

*smiling at you*

The imagery alone in this leaves the reader impressed...the glorious descriptive colors that you use and the phrasing that is uniquely YOU then add that to the form which you have made your own...then just look at the poetic treats you sprinkle in this with the alliteration.
Very cool and very lovely Melis.

So it seems your saving grace was only saving face,
you thought he was wanting you...
but he was only wanting you to let him off the hook.

~BNL~

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Deep in the heart

9 posted 2002-03-07 11:15 AM

Well, I for one think this is BEAUTIFUL!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Sven

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10 posted 2002-03-07 04:27 PM

"Sun sets to damask"

now this is an image. . .

keep finding your voice my friend. . . it's coming out more and more. . .

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