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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19

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0 posted 2002-03-06 01:44 PM

I find silence and calling in the remains of a chandelier
that once flickered in a wall of window on a hill,
light slicing divine and a desire.
Energy infests the beating warm cavity of me,
deep and devious with it’s will,
to witness the shatter and ghosting of glitter
with a shotgun shell again, just twice, fulfilled.
To crystal splinter the sea and me, oh my.
(anger can be so beautiful - a god damn gorgeous mess)
The lawn and pavement, sparkle sinned and crying,
trickling friction through the blades,
swelling Saturday's tides caught off guard,
and wondering now in circles
around mulberry bushes and vine.
And I, walk myself along the edge of whispers
and see the beauty in this destruction,
wrap the core of silence in a bang, and long for a rerun of it all.

[This message has been edited by SpitFire (03-06-2002 07:31 PM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

1 posted 2002-03-06 01:54 PM

First the anger, then the calm. You have a wonderfully unique way of contrasting human emotions to the shattering of crystal and sharply swollen blades of grass.
But with hopefulness, you "wrap the core of silence in a bang, and long for a rerun of it all" I love it.

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

2 posted 2002-03-06 01:56 PM

And I, walk myself along the edge of whispers
and see the beauty in this destruction

Intensity holds a certain beauty and fascination, even when born of destruction and anger. Incredible work!

Martie

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3 posted 2002-03-06 02:07 PM

SpitFire

You write with such incredible depth the true of you. Awesome!

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

4 posted 2002-03-06 02:11 PM

This is chillingly well done! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2002-03-06 02:17 PM

Well I have to be honest that sometimes I don't fully understand what you are saying, but I love what I get out of your writing, and look forward to each and every piece that you post, for I learn so much from your work. Beautifully done as usual, as you squeeze everything out of a word.

~* Without deep reflection one knows from daily life that one exists for other people ." *~

Einstein

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

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East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2002-03-06 02:49 PM

the beauty of anger. . . crystalline. . . but yet. . .

hmmmmmm. . . there is more here, I know that there is. . . only you could make the words come together in this way. . .

excellent my friend. . . Peace. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-03-06 05:15 PM

BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is emotionally powerful, sweet friend, I know this feeling ever so much and sometimes we best express ourselves with rage and intensity, then once we let it all out, we find peace and learn to love ourselves quietly at heart! (smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much, God Bless You! (big hugggsssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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8 posted 2002-03-06 05:17 PM

Wow A, this is deep and powerful.
enjoyed very much, especially...

(anger can be so beautiful - a god damn gorgeous mess)

and

And I, walk myself along the edge of whispers
and see the beauty in this destruction,
wrap the core of silence in a bang, and long for a rerun of it all.

Tremendous!

Maree

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

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The Shores of Alone

9 posted 2002-03-06 05:24 PM

This poem is strong and beautiful, just the way I see you.
Sandra

Christopher

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since 1999-08-02

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Purgatorial Incarceration

10 posted 2002-03-06 06:22 PM

To crystal splinter the sea and me, oh my.

heh - I LOVED this line... it was a whimsical interlude amidst the pressure of jagged recollections. needless to say i don't gather all the references in this - i have the feeling with all of your poetry that many segments are slices of your life which only those who walk it with you would understand. still, the looking back, the longing, i think i got that part. aalong with the above (which made me smile really big) my fave line was - Energy infests the beating warm cavity of me,

sweet lady A, very sweet.

C

ps - it's dIvine, not dEvine. (and kill the comma after "chandelier" please.

vandana

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11 posted 2002-03-06 06:35 PM

enjoyed

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

12 posted 2002-03-06 07:45 PM

~

Thank you, thank you. For time and reading, and honesty and thought. I treasure each of your words, please know. (and Chris, thank you, funny thing though, I did the spell check, and it came up as being mispelled but the suggestions offered just weren't working, I had decided that I was spelling it correctly, and so didn't bother to look it up in the book, and now look, ahaa, I had a friend named devine once, maybe that. I scratched the comma in the first line, it was a good suggestion yeah, I often fuddle with those things).
*Peace poets. Thank you.

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