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ShadowRider
Senior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

0 posted 2002-03-03 12:27 PM

             the Watcher (and the Watched)

    I had disposed of hope ages ago
       imaging a before-someplace, a destination
       unattainable, but always just out of reach
    A brief glimpse, a residue image
       that was all I saw of the Watcher
       but it was enough to coil my spirit like a cobra
      and draw me to her
    Hostility was an hors d'oeuvre served cold
       with much gusto I devoured it, or it me

    After that one day, on the balcony
       when the Watcher pierced me with assurance
       I knew I was changed
    Everything I was to do - every motion I was to make
       she would see, view, and critique
       feel her, but not see her, yet she was there
       the ceaslessly rustling taffeta sound before she arrived
       always leaving me the Gift
            hope

    When she had thoroughly tainted my soul
       painting it in galleries of beneficence
       she let me finally see her, fully, shimmering virtue
       she smiled, giving me the Gift one last time
                faith

  I was ne'er to see her again,
       except to feel her at great distances
       perhaps still Watching, still over my shoulder

    I kept with me, always,
           another Gift
    the large gilded, golden feather
    that had dropped from her massive wings

[This message has been edited by ShadowRider (03-03-2002 12:39 PM).]

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-03-03 12:35 PM

I am sitting here smiling and shaking my head in amazement! What an outstanding write this is! Seldom does a piece render me speechless but this one has my friend. Exquistely penned! Breathtakingly beautiful in word and presentation! I cannot find the words..so I shall just say, thank you, and into my library this goes.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2002-03-03 12:53 PM

This is so beautiful Jeff..this is one for the library...hugss

~Victoria~

"Mistakes are the portals of discovery."
-- James Joyce

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

3 posted 2002-03-03 12:55 PM

oops i forgot to check off the library ha.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-03-03 01:10 PM

"I was ne'er to see her again,
       except to feel her at great distances
       perhaps still Watching, still over my shoulder

    I kept with me, always,
           another Gift
    the large gilded, golden feather
    that had dropped from her massive wings"

BRAVO!!! OH MY GOSH, I AGREE WITH VICTORIA AND NANCY, THIS IS OUTSTANDING AND BY FAR ONE OF YOUR BEST YET!!! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) Oh my gosh, this has made me speechless, I also am adding this to my library, this should be
published! We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

janmew
Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 134
Canada

5 posted 2002-03-03 01:14 PM

Yes, beautifully done indeed! Such poetic depth it has! I love it!

Jan

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2002-03-03 01:19 PM

Jeff~ This is outstanding!
I love your ability to transcribe your visions in detail.
What a lovely read from you this morning.

I hope you have yourself a nice Sunday over there.

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray