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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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A blade of grass bending in the breeze is less resilient than your spirit, which I feel flies freely in spite of your wounds, all the restraints placed upon you because of a careless move by another on a highway so long ago. You are a forever friend, and although it’s time for me to move onto another pathway, I am thankful for the time we’ve spent together. You’ve gifted me with many smiles, so gracious and lovely they’ve often outshone the warmest morning sunshine. Thank you, Sue, for letting me be your friend, and for giving me the same friendship in return. *for my friend, Sue* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well Sue is one lucky person to have such a poetic friend that is all I can say about this lovely jesture of words.  |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
That was a beautiful poem. It is always nice to read poetry that reflects such friendships. In some ways the poem sounds a little bit jisjointed stylistically in places. For example, you begin the poem with a comparison/metaphor which quickly morphs into what sounds more like a matter of fact statement in the line "which I feel flies freely". However, just after that line you move back into the figurative language very quickly. On the whole, however, I enjoyed this poem. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kacy - this was beautiful and a lasting gift of friendship. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
there isn't really nothing to say except "beautiful"....the first two lines evoked such powerful imagery that spiced up the rest of this poem and made it memorable...i would have been happy to receive this one...heehee  A blade of grass bending in the breeze is less resilient than your spirit, |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
I bet Sue loves this poem.. There's a beautiful feeling through this poem, and I reckon it can be captured perfectly with your line "You are a forever friend".. A much nicer way of saying it than 'you are a friend forever', or 'you are forever a friend'.. Perhaps forever-friend should be hyphenated? Your introduction is so loving.. Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thanking each of you more than you know for taking a moment to read and comment on this one. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
o so this is where you've been hiding..  very wise and powerful words from the insight of you |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Beautiful writing Midnitesun |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
A beautiful tribute to friendship... if only we all had more such friends... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
thanking each of you for your moment in time Sue is a special lady, and yes, she loved this write |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kasy I'm sure that Sue feels very lucky to have you as a friend. You, and this poem, are special.  |
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