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just like heaven

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2003-10-03 01:20 AM

secrets
pirouette
upon
my flesh
faeries
rest
heavy
upon my eyelids
unspoken
converstations
linger
upon
my lips
intrigue
burning
my thoughts
like
hot
candle wax...

...your words...

bring
my
collapsing
cynicism
to
a
gasping
halt...

deep breath...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

1 posted 2003-10-03 02:33 AM

Love the song, love the poem that came as a result, love the whole goddamned enterprise!

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (10-03-2003 02:33 AM).]

LoveBug

Moderator

Member Elite

since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

2 posted 2003-10-14 04:01 PM

Don't know the song, but it's a lovely piece.. I especially love the next to last stanza, where he brings your cynic to a grinding halt! I never liked cynical things

lol.. but anyway, I love the structure of it all, nice word usage, well done.

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-10-15 04:03 PM

dont know the song??!!!!
*smile*

I'll sing for you then . . .

You
Soft and only
You
Lost and lonely
You
Strange as angels
Dancing in the deepest oceans
Twisting in the water
You're just like a dream

God Kris what beauty you write of
and yes . . .
one of my favorites
besides "Lullaby" and "Song for Heather"
and "There is no if" and . . .
*smile*
I miss you
xxoo

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