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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-09-25 03:09 PM

unstitched sleeping process
promulgates in poetry. each
line responds to light's repose,
sound's unsound reasoning. if
one could hold out breath between
a clocks' eye view of surety,
one could swim the underside
of colors under glass. one could
press his face against, engaged
in all his fading dreams. the
sight is something undertaken
without want of dignity. each
sleeping line of verse upon
the page is burning in each blink.
untouched songs between the aisles,
filing toward the door. a magnet
pulling seeds of memories
straight across the unlit hours.
a voice of syllables imbued,
defining context within sound.
that holds the fading unread seams
on cue, and then he puts them down.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-09-26 12:24 PM

Another that begs to be read aloud.

I love that you are brave and astute enough to continue the meter past the punctuation:

"promulgates in poetry. each"

and continued, more pronounced throughout the poem.

I think this is truly your all time best love poem. This is passion, yes, but distilled with time and understanding.

This is mellowed wine from fine grape.

Thank you.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2003-09-26 11:56 AM

Thanks for the close reading, Sen. I'm really happy with this one.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-09-26 11:37 PM

L@ve the feel of this, a slow unravel

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