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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
A hand sharply lifted the blind dust, cat hair…suddenly silver in the sunlight denied the sign she rested against the window crude, cold metal black, white, red Vacancy all it said |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Okay, I'll bite. You got me with this one. What the heck is it all about? If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Thanks for splainin. It's very sad in that context isn't it? Very sad If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Fallon Junior Member
since 2002-01-07
Posts 21USA |
I don't understand it either, but in a way I do. 'A word is dead when it is said, some say. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the imagery....the impact ... the ache ... this conjures up a scene from an old movie.... very cool write of imagery and metaphor poet sir. jm Even thru the darkest phase, be it thick or thin |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Duncan, If I am correct in my understanding of this piece, she is extremely lonely with a vacant heart. Beautifully sad indeed. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
sounds like a very lonely person..sad one..enjoyed Duncan.. ~Vic "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice work Duncan.... a bit abstract perhaps out of context but not hard to build the scenario in your mind... I enjoyed! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) I too felt a sign of loneliness behind these words, it sounds like she feels unloved and her heart is empty, just waiting for someone to climb into her heart and love her. (big hugggsssss) So sad but wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
This is probably the saddest poem you've written my friend, really touched me. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Duncan, rereading this I think I understand it a little better. On the outside always looking in? even so great piece. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Whatever the intent, the result is an emotional write of great loss and pain, and intense loneliness. I sense that someone left, and she is still hopefully awaiting their return, which never comes. Well done, Duncan. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
it's very intense, left me (and it took a few reads, I'll admit) with a raw feeling like when you are out in the cold rain and the sign says "vacancy" nothing makes you feel so cast out. That's the feeling I got from it. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I know this may sound strange but this poem gave me a feeling of a woman wanting to hear from the one she loved but when she didn't she felt empty inside...Very interesting poem...it sure touched me in a strange way. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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