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A Bridge Never Seen -- Revisited
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A Bridge Never Seen -- Revisited |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA 
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A Bridge Never Seen - Revisited we meet minutes before sunset dragging our clinging pasts plastered to our heels from our privy place yoked inseparably pulled in tandem prompted for this appointed event the most provocative sunset you'll never see the kind of sunset we jointly concede as umber spilling luminescent redolent daydeath begins light fades we enter that suspension time cross that ethereal bridge as it reveals itself incrementally you know the type not one of arches or pillars we reach absolute center no more no less i know as i've been here many times without you measuring carefully obsessively sunset crescendo plays; resonates we turn at the appointed time to stare generationally into one another's shared past and matrixed present until we see all then, of course, i look away and jump just as you expected just as you directed you disengage slowly ruffle your paper dispel the mists and dream of the day you may finally deliver pizzas or sell tech stocks unable to appreciate the sunsets you never saw never suspecting i-you-we live on thanks to Kafka who caught me or that i love you © 4/12/2000 Bart Breen never try to teach a pig to sing |
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Sunset Member
since 2002-01-08
Posts 80 |
This is very thought provoking, Bart. Am saving to read over a few more times. My compliments to your talent.  The ending was very powerful. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Such interesting visions you weave in a way that draws the reader to go deeper to find the meaning of love behind your words. Well done. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Very deep, Bart and so very thought provoking.  Also, sad and very well written. Thanks for sharing it with us. copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
daydeath begins light fades we enter that suspension time cross that ethereal bridge as it reveals itself incrementally you know the type not one of arches or pillars we reach absolute center no more no less i know as i've been here many times without you measuring carefully obsessively sunset crescendo plays; resonates we turn at the appointed time to stare generationally into one another's shared past and matrixed present until we see all =========================================== this is superb poetic blending of imagery and vocabulary. you have painted some very unique images and visions with your phrasing, word choices, and analogies of nature. "daydeath begins" ... that is a very cool metaphor for sunset....unique and dramatic. most impressive writing Poet Sir jm |
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