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At dusk
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At dusk |
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dawn to dusk Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 68Colorado |
I want to thank you all for your warm welcome to this forum.With being so shy and timid about my poetry, you all really helped me out by being so supportive and encouraging to my writing.After posting my first poem, I've had many people ask me to write another, so I played with some ideas, and I finally came to this.It could you use some work, but that's where you come in.Help me become a better writer and let me know what you think. At dusk During the day, the bad feelings disappear I'm warmed by the light, the sunlight brings cheer and all fears fade away As dusk approaches, as the sun slowly fades away forgotten thoughts began to linger in the darkening shadows of my mind. By night I feel pain The gossamer cobwebs fill my mind with nightmares I can't sleep I stay awake in bed Horrors running through my head During the day I'm alright, but when darness rolls in stay with me, hold me, tell me it is alright don't leave me alone tonight Noelle Eaton "Hold fast to dreams, for is dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly" Langston Hughes |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
Oh Noelle I will hold you during the night, and keep those pesky nightmares away. The horrors of darkness have a hold on many of us. Superb poem Noelle!!! You compare very well to your brother in your styles. Awesome write, I am serious! I Love you Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Streen Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169 |
You did an awesome job here! Please continue to write. ^_^ -Derek |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Soooooooo wonderfully said, sweet sister, I am sooooooo proud of you and so happy you're posting here with me and all my friends! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, and we all love your wonderful words! Keep writing, dearest sister, you have true talent, we all believe in you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Noelle, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Noelle, This is a great poem. No worries, you have Randy to comfort you whenever you need it! Keep these good poems coming! (hugs) Joanna |
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