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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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All aboard! what a literary hoard! all those rhymes in a row don't let them go all those visions verbal incisions to set a flow and create a reader's glow. Show your tickets you've paid at the wickets! of the phrase incursions welcome specialized word surgeons... sometimes operating on terminal cases of sentences on the recluse of statements in abuse. Next stop is at the poems end around the next bend! The poet would hang himself by a noose if he didn't let himself loose just talking a word here and there as if he were grasping for air. The train now stops for a quick bite time to rest for the next write! And the message, in the case of rhymes is much like the masters of mime, expressed with wide flowing body gestures, creating miniscule hidden lectures. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-04-2002 11:09 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW, you are on a virtual poetry train. Let it roar down these blue tracks, where all can enjoy writing and reading, without the attacks. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
some 'attacks' may be constructive and meant to contribute to our mastering other techniques,yet I do believe as you that there has to be that freedom we have here where we can ask for it if we want to and deny it if we don't...we still live under constitutions don't we?   [This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-04-2002 11:27 PM).] |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
"And the message, in the case of rhymes is much like the masters of mime," Martin - Very cool write. You definitely rhymed the heck out of this one. Really good. Dave |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martin darling boy wonderful writing as always. I seem to following Dave today, pouncing on all the glorious writes after Dave has read them. Is this excellent? Mmmmmm Yes Martin darling boy tis wonderful, and your rhyme scheme is perfect. As always Mushy    To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
YAY!!! Choo-choo! Next stop, Inspiration Valley. (giggles) I love it, sweet friend, you always set up the rails to such beautiful wonders of poetry and inspiration! I love it, sweet friend, you are a delight to us all! (big hugggsssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A great great poem, Martin...and I do agree with you...poets need certain freedoms. This could almost be the companion piece to the one I wrote called "The Poetry Police". Fantastic job!   copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Mac Attack Member
since 2001-12-12
Posts 100Ontario, Canada |
LOL! Excellent Martin. Your talent amazes me. Mac |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Dave, mime to me is poetry without words..was at a clown worksop last year and some clowns train well in mime. Marsha There you go we're on a train Madme Chip, I see a sutle reference to the goons of everypoet can be intuited from the last couple of lines, this is a repost though from before. Noah, thanks for riding the train. Mac, the talent flows from all sources, and if you channel yourself to some inspiration it will come in due time...thanks for the complements but this is light stuff compared to some other writes, and the stuff on other sites too. |
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