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Mercury Talks |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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I am the messenger of all gods I will transport gifts of pods you are a larger sister hidden in clouds surface views are shielded by your shrouds but after is the emerald planet blue dot in an cosmic ocean of black a resting place for my delivered pack. I shy away from the planet of red cut by volcanic action, they said it was dead. it has a sister planet, not as hot with rings around it of carbon dioxide crystals it is thought. And so my scope as your mercury comes close for your security my messages go far and wide and wherever humanity cannot hide 'cause worldly men cannot imagine the scope at which my winged feet take me humanity cannot fathom, I am a god at liberty. |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
This is very Carl Sandberg, ec! Good write. Love the planetary metaphors. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 As a Gemini, mercury is my ruling planet (which has been retrograde too long, I might add) Loved this 'e'. I love it when poets channel gods! Would love to see more in this fashion. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Great job an on interesting topic. I loved the dual description of Mercury. About the only things you left out were the mercury in the thermometer and the automobile of the same name.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Amusemi, Am complemented by that comparison.. Serenity yes but if you see another post such this using planetary metaphors and you laud that...since it doesn't take much for any average poet to do...I am challenging you to a planetary, Sandburglike write..go ahead and enjoy! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Lyra, still don't know where you dig up those nifty clips  but enjoy your comments almost as muchas reading some poems! [This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-08-2002 12:04 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Don't know about the average poet thing, 'e'--and me and Carl Sandburg, tho I love the work, that style doesn't flow from me, but I'll think on it....Planetary, eh, well you can be sure of one thing...it won't be Uranus!  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
well choose nother planet then!Uranus is out...no I didn't mean to expose you..Oh my goodness what am I saying   |
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