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Evoking Passion
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Evoking Passion |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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There is a storm deep within My torn heart, thunder echoes When I bask in reflection, My battered heart Reveals confession On bended knees I fall, Winds of time have Altered my direction What once was blue Is now grey and black I have felt passion Upon wanting lips And now stand In my own devastation, No need to tell lies We all suffer truth Just pretend you need me With memories I thought I would never find I now stand as most, Looking for feelings that will Never be, and reaching for a time That never existed Still the river runs ***** Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-04-2002 12:52 AM).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh my gosh could I ever feel this one. You have said perfectly what I often feel. Magnifcent writing. *sigh* stunning in it's affect. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - I felt this one also, as Startime did. You are an excellent poet, and can put into words what one feels inside. A gift it is... BC |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You always write free verse so well Lauren..it flowed like a river..enjoyed. Hugs ~Victoria~ "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, Your messin' with my gut here. Wow. I hate thinking you know heartache so well. Let me at him... |
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Keith Morgan Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 114Md |
very nicely written. a very heroic and brave ending. it gives me mind to think and ponder past........... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
So many of us can connect with this, sweet friend. We've all made mistakes, taken the easy way out, "settled" and chose not to take a chance, chase a dream, to be a risk taker. It's called "life" and we live it as we must. You've done well with this poem. You made me think and I'm sure you've done the same with others. It is most certainly one of you best works that I've been privileged to read. *hugs* Lauren and keep the words flowing. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Lauren, this is so so sad but beautiful, I know just how you feel, for I believe emotionally we are always battered every now and then, but the river of truth will always wind, and you will find passion to joy and dreams bound to come true! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is by far one of your best yet! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
You have a way with words that touches Lauren. This one is felt......deeply. wonderful hon. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very accurate title-- this one does evoke There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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OWG Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 155California |
provoking memories you pose with I know you eyes well done babe!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"still the river runs" Oh, Lauren, this is absolutely soft and melancoly. Thank you for this one. My perception of truth will somehow never quite be the same..and so I write. |
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