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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-01-28 04:30 PM

Then The Ocean is
Beautiful at night
Stretched beyond sight
In imagination
Of shadows and sand

I hold no regrets,
Until evening blends
My thoughts into a
Pattern of black,
I wish for the color
Of dusk, in woven
Fabrics, an
Orchestra of sound,
But the logic of wind
Blows them silently together,

Like fireflies
They remain untouchable

Sometimes

A night owl
Dancing provocatively,
Making waves jealous
Of time forgotten,
Leaving traces along
An island of audience

Pavilions of light
Embrace tidal
Waters, feeding
Sand it’s mellowing
Color of life,
Of form

Where

Falling from scattered
Stars

A tender heart beats,
Embraced in silent storms,
For a mindful soul

Weeping still in winter

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-28-2002 04:36 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-01-28 04:36 PM

(sigh) Sooooooooo beautifully bittersweet, sweet friend, I too can always picture winter as an analogy of emptiness, and the absence of color as melancholy, but the spring will always follow and offer us rainbow thoughts of cheerfulness that will always color our ribbons with hope! (kiss on cheek) Soooooooo wonderfully written, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

2 posted 2002-01-28 05:10 PM

Greeneyes, so beautiful are your words.

"Falling from scattered
Stars
A tender heart beats,
Embraced in silent storms,
For a mindful soul
Weeping still in winter"

really had a hard time picking my favorite in this piece. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

3 posted 2002-01-28 05:59 PM

Enjoyed all the verses Lauren..very lovely

~Vic

You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

-Ziggy

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2002-01-28 06:36 PM

a feast of words, Lauren! Wow, you know I LOVE color don't you ? I can always count on your poems to be a treat for the senses.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2002-01-28 07:29 PM

Pavilions of light
Embrace tidal
Waters, feeding
Sand it's mellowing
Color of life,
Of form

Where

Falling from scattered
Stars

A tender heart beats,
Embraced in silent storms,
For a mindful soul

Weeping still in winter
================================

if I just softly sighed...and whispered "thank you" ...
would you just know......
yes...you would..............

*sigh* ... thank you.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

6 posted 2002-01-28 07:31 PM

*sigh* such a gentle vision of great beauty...This poem rings with a sweet music that gives your reader a soothing feeling. BRAVO!!! I love it. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

7 posted 2002-01-28 07:56 PM

You know I love this and the ending works very well.

Please know that you're in my thoughts, sweet friend. *hugs*

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

8 posted 2002-01-28 11:21 PM

Lauren,
I'd like to meet you there. This was wonderful, so wonderful. Thanks.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

9 posted 2002-01-29 01:48 AM

Greeneyes - a revelation of color it is. You do write very well, I compliment you...

BC

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