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Eyes Of One
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Eyes Of One |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Eyes of One Once again I tried, my previous tied up thoughts unraveling before me, as I planned my steps towards nightfall. Disappointment almost caved me in, timing, always in wait of the drink. Tears slowed, desire to please returned and I continued on. Gathered those close to him, burnt 56 candles plus one, almost melting the cake and more, those not wanting to be gone in one breath, returning to sparkle, and dance the shadows in the dark. He was there, and she was there, two shes in fact, to tease him into youthfulness, as I sideline watched. Someone turned to me, and said they saw love in my eyes, each time I looked his way. Overhearing, he bent his head down, I blushed, felt the heat rise, turned towards the words and let my eyes say it all. "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like this, Maureen.... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I like your free verse, it followed one thought all the way through  Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Someone turned to me, and said they saw love in my eyes, each time I looked his way. Overhearing, he bent his head down, I blushed, felt the heat rise, turned towards the words and let my eyes say it all. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Maureen, I love the feel and flow of this...of course I love free verse! This is very beautiful and full of great imagery. Well done! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Karilea... I sort of like it myself, another diary entry for me...some day I will look back on this and maybe let out a smile instead of a tear and a sigh. M Kay...yes, this was a follow up to the all tied up verses...It was a very strange evening. ((hugs)) Maureen Nancy...I am not a free verse poet... but some words and thoughts are not meant to be rhymed..thank you for your kind words.*s M "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul." (J.Garland) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (01-27-2002 10:46 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Ooohhhhhh, this is soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, this could be a part of a wonderful diary series of poetry from you! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Dear Noah..a diary series??? this IS my life *s you are sweet in that Noah sort of way... (innocence becomes you) M |
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brianbeaudry Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 410Northern Ontario Canada |
The power of a glance....many lines written into the briefest look...I loved it Maureen!!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
brian...I was just sending a message to a friend...life is strange...my husband, who is sort of estranged *s yet not, is always near enough to help me when needed, now. My water heater is leaking, I joked, it's sort of like me, after 21 years, it's crying tears, too...knowing it needs to be replaced. Thank you Maureen [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (01-27-2002 11:21 AM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maureen--There is a time when only the eyes can say it...much enjoyed this poem! |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
The true feeling never goes away or should they? (Two views in one line must remember this.)But they are tucked within us to cherish at the right time smiling away in front of others. Blessings and happiness. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Martie...eyes sometimes reveal too much, sometimes the love that won't be spoken and sometimes the dislike...for another. Thank you..I prefer the first. M D.Lester Young...I don't think the true feeling ever is lost..maybe it has changed sometimes temporarily other times forever... And I guess to cherish what one once had is the best of the memory to keep. thank you for your kind words. Maureen "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
nakdthoughts - you write such words, ones of sadness that I read, but I have seen the spark. And it will prevail... BC |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
It was a very interesting weekend Bill..missed you though..glad to see you back hugss M "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
BRAVA! SUPERB! The last line is a KILLER! The whoe piece speaks of fabulous poetic ability! WOW! Maureen, this is, in my opinion, your finest work. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You flatter me, I. I am not so sure this is a good piece of writing...and I am not sure whether one gets the real meaning behind this poem or its last line..*s Thank you for reading and responding missed you...*s Maureen |
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