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Deception Detection |
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DarkAngelChelle Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 87Kansas |
The door whispers open, creaking its protest on hinges in need of lubrication, once loud screams hoarse from begging for slick liquid relief. Silent silhouette sneaks in, mouse-quiet, making sure to close with care. Darkness hides a frigid figure, frozen on the couch in a tableau of waiting, frown in place, and tired circles drowning tiny red rivers which surround watery brown irises. You tiptoe softly, only the rhythmic tit-a-tat, tit-a-tat betraying the quiet retreat. You reach the steps, lean down to take off power shoes, brown and business-like, soles made to fit the art of trampling others. In stockinged feet, you start to ascend, thinking your angel will welcome you as always before, lost in luxurious sleep, oblivious to the Devil who sleeps beside her. One flick of a switch, surprise! Even angels feel the need to investigate why mortals and demons like to linger on Earth, forsaking the pleasure of what should be perfect paradise. Blessed light floods the stage, the final act revealing cherry stains on collar and sleeves, ruffled, rumpled countenance guilty, but satisfaction still showing in the faint smile of a fox who's eaten his fill. And knows there's more. Or so he thinks. (But he's never so sly as his vixen.) Your mouth opens, silken fibs tumble forth, rush as cattle from lips like poisoned pens. As you make your pretty speeches, illumination shuns your eyes, shadows soak bright, sopping in fluorescent gravy. Excuses, excuses, well, excuuuuse me! You think your shiny, obsidian lies are dagger enough to cut holes into the Afterlife, gaining you entrance to eternal bliss, allowing access to higher portals of love, regardless of the way you like to toy with vices of the flesh. Good thinking. The front is heavily guarded. But backdoors are usually trapped. ~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~ [This message has been edited by DarkAngelChelle (01-23-2002 09:55 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh my goodness, now you're talking! We all set our standards as to what we can live with and without and how much we are willing to accept. With one eye on the door at all times. (of course)  This is fantastic in it's entirety! Really really!!! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
ABSOLUTELY STUNNING!!!Emotion just pours out of your words. Magnificent...you have capture the art of deception very well. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
DarkAngelChelle - wow, you told this tale well... BC |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! MARVELOUS!!! Oh my gosh, you speak of the trickery of love so wonderfully in this poem, there is indeed a big difference in what is required of our hearts to what we accept and support! (big hugggsssssss) WOW!!! We're all amazed by your talent, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michelle, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You think your shiny, obsidian lies are dagger enough to cut holes into the Afterlife, gaining you entrance to eternal bliss, allowing access to higher portals of love, regardless of the way you like to toy with vices of the flesh. WOW!!!!!!! I loved this one, Chell.... You are a master of evil storytelling.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
very very good ....... enjoyed |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Michelle - Good to have you back. This is an excellent write. Hopefully, the afterlife gate security is better then our airline security, otherwise, this guy still has a good chance of getting in.lol  Dave |
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