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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I want to warm myself at your fire, I want to ride the tide of your passion. But your fire doesnt burn for me, And passions tide is at its ebb. I cant touch the man inside, And that hurts worse than anything I've ever known. Its a funny masquerade you play... ...a high wire act, Balancing my need Against your...what? I'm just an island in your ocean... ...a resting place. I'll never be your destination, But I cant let you go. What does that say about me? |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
It says very clearly that you are very much in love...*sigh* my heart hurts for you that the love you feel brings you pain instead of joy...that is a feeling I know well...to love someone but not have them return your love the way you need it returned. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. [This message has been edited by Startime (01-16-2002 10:11 PM).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it's hard to let go. . . this is full of that longing and the feelings that we get when letting go is the hardest thing to do. . . --------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Keith Morgan Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 114Md |
Very heartfelt and touching. It definitely says that you are a woman of patience. Not a bad quality to have. Nicely written poem. Thanks for sharing. Write from the soul and the words will flow |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
This is so sad and full of love! He shouldn't take you for granted. You should be the destination!!!! Take heart, there are always wonderful surprises in store for tomorrow! This was a fabulous poem! |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Paula, thanks for sharing this sad, though beautiful poem. It should remind all of us that we need to return the love we receive for it to be complete. And not take it for granted.  -Silver Streak Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Heartbreaking in its message-- the emotions come thru along with it-- been sometime since i have read any of your poems -- too long-- enjoyed this one. take care J There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula darling sister of my soul, this is without doubt one of your utter best. And now you’ve made me cry. What is this a conspiracy? I know your tricks darling girl you think I’ll be less attractive with red rimmed eyes? Hhhmm! Well unlucky darling girl my eyes look like a field of bluebells that have been washed by the summer rain They don’t but I’m surely allowed some poetic licence. Good! You know that this is utterly wonderful don’t you, the flow is just perfect All joking aside I hope beloved sister of my heart that this isn’t actually reality here? The last time I spoke to you I know you were as happy as can be, so I really do hope not. Love you lil sister mine YOU truly have written an utterly utterly wonderful poem here    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well, though the theme is of a sad aching broken heart, it is so well written I really enjoyed reading. What does that say about me, that I enjoy pain? The heart bleeds through in this one, Paula. Not being the 'destination' of the one you love can be devastating. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Paula, this is so very sad, my heart cries out to you, for I believe many of us truly do feel this way! (sad sigh) I pray with all my heart that he can hear your heart cry and forgive you and touch your heart where you've dreamed of love touching you and shower you with happiness! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, all our hearts go out to you and hope these tears of sorrow will tuen to tears of joy soon, I know they can! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Paula, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Paula, good to read you again. This left me with many emotions, probably because it IS hard to let go. Hey, where's that little devil? Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
There's a fine line between love and codependence. This poem illustrates that and very succinctly expresses a myriad of emotions. An effective and provocative poem. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Your words speak volumes of the love and heartache you have.I hope it eases for you soon.You have expressed it very well. Peaches |
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