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SEA

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with you

0 posted 2001-11-26 10:16 AM

In early morning stillness
Snow powdering window’s view
Heart lost in flurry
Swirling thoughts of you

Intimate recollection
With sips from warm brew
Stirring, recomposing
Old memories made new

Silent echoes reach out
Call in reminding pursue
This aching, this wanting
Will never be through

Anticipating, contemplating
All I should do
Preparing for storm
About to ensue

Dressing in layers
Wishing to subdue
These wintering remembrances
Of when I loved you

~SEA~

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-11-26 10:19 AM

This is wintering in its finest layers...and how is that series coming?

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2001-11-26 10:32 AM

Nice working the feel of the metaphor, I think I actually felt a chill and could just "see" you staring out of the window, lost in thought. Great job with this one, Sue!

bslicker

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state of mind

3 posted 2001-11-26 10:36 AM

This is one of your great ones!!!!!!!!

Bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

vandana

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USA

4 posted 2001-11-26 10:38 AM

enjoyed

Auguste

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By the sea

5 posted 2001-11-26 11:49 AM

Susan,

I very much enjoyed the imagery in this piece. You're a fine writer, sweetie. (((hugs)))

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

CocoBaci
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6 posted 2001-11-26 12:11 PM

Sea, I read your poem twice this morning and when I come here in2 reply box2 convey2u just how gooooooooood it is I'm stuck so I flip back2 re-read it once more perhaps pull out a verse or two and still get stuck cuz the whole content is exquisite...
This is one of my favorites that you have shared and I'm gonna keep this one in my treasure box for many days ahead...
Muahhhh on cheeks2uSweetie
*~coco~*

Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

7 posted 2001-11-26 12:13 PM

Exquisitely written emotions...

regards to you, my friend,
sudhir

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Canada eh.

8 posted 2001-11-26 12:15 PM

Susan~You know I love this! The longing in your words reaches out to me...and leaves me with memories of my own. Well done!
~hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale

9 posted 2001-11-26 12:36 PM

absolutely fantastic

ever deep...runs
the wishing well
for fairytale illusions

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2001-11-26 01:23 PM

Wonderful sharing of feelings...I think I'll go have some tea now...James

jwesley
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11 posted 2001-11-26 01:47 PM

Definite keeper! Very well done.

jwesley

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Deep in the heart

12 posted 2001-11-26 02:38 PM

Bet those were warm winters

Janet Marie
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13 posted 2001-11-26 08:14 PM

Intimate recollection
With sips from warm brew
Stirring, recomposing
Old memories made new

Silent echoes reach out
Call in reminding pursue
This aching, this wanting
Will never be through
==================================

This is excellent writing Sea...
very cool rhyme scheme, vocab, phrasing and use of imagery and the incoming season to express the emotions...
I for one am greatly enjoying watching your poetry mature and seeing you reach deep for the words.

As for that ache?
ya know what "they" say ...
what dont kill us makes us moths...errr I mean--stronger

he said ... "dont cry" ...
said "it only hurts forever ... and all we have is time."

~Tabitha's Secret~

rosepetals25

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PA

14 posted 2001-11-26 08:51 PM

Susan,

I don't know what took me so long to get in here.. but I'm glad I made it. You are such a wonderful writer. I love to read your words

Hugs,
Tara.... who never emails

but should.

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Mysteria

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British Columbia, Canada

15 posted 2001-11-26 10:43 PM

Wow Susan, this is a fantastic poem, and into my library it went. Yanno, I think this is my favorite of yours thus far, truly.

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

Startime
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16 posted 2001-11-26 10:49 PM

*sigh* the magic of snow brought back magical memories of love for you. How very beautiful this poem is. I love it. It has such a wishful feel to it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

misguided angel
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17 posted 2001-11-27 05:18 AM

SEA, the longing in this brings back memories of someone I wish was a lot closer. Thank you, I enjoyed.
Andrea

Summon the courage to step out of your familiar rut and suddenly many of those things which held you back will no longer have the power to do so.

Kit McCallum

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18 posted 2001-11-27 07:23 AM

What a wonderfully visual piece Susan! You've captured such an intimate moment of thought and painted it through your words so perfectly. Lovely sentiments, much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Tracey
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where insanity meets breeding

19 posted 2001-11-27 07:25 AM

Lovely reminisces this morning to go with my morning coffee as I try to wake up.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Elizabeth Santos
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20 posted 2001-11-27 07:55 AM

Layers of thought make a warm and tender poem
Liz

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

21 posted 2001-11-27 07:19 PM

All I can say is WOW!!!!!!! I leave for a little while and come back and find that our little SEA as grown to a new level in her poetry and I am much impressed my friend. It is so nice to see you stretching that talent of yours to the levels that we all know you can reach. Much enjoyed and look forward to reading many more.

Dusty Rhodes
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22 posted 2001-11-27 08:02 PM

What a wonderful read, thank you very much

SEA

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with you

23 posted 2001-11-27 09:22 PM

Thank you all so very much. The mornings here are so quiet and peaceful, and well, when it snows or rains...

gotta love it.

and Mark....you just need to come 'round more.You are dearly missed.

again, thank you, each of you, very much

"If your ship doesn't come in, swim out to it." ~Jonathan Winters

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