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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-11-25 11:44 PM

imagine
fingers forestry
as my hand slides up the thigh
imagine
warm fluidity
the poetry
of thunder's sighs--
the press of chest--
flesh on flesh
open eyes that tell no lies
and span the gulf of inbetween--
we fit--
as sure as lock and key.

Home...
within you
(home)
I'm free...
You 'ground' me and yet
give me wing.
No confinement
in your arms
Your eyes
a promise
of no harm
your fingers
invoke god-like charm
there's no one else I'd rather be,
for you bring out the best in me.

Just the accident of touch
sometimes is a bit too much
I blush and swoon with buckled knee
quite certain everyone can see--
a hungry child smells baking bread--
"Please," I whisper. "Please." I beg.
"Serve me on a silver tray.
I was born to die this way.
Pour your honey over me--
I will risk the buzzing bee.
I will take the burn of sting
and in my pain I'll learn to sing..."

For that is how the blues were born.
A loss of love, forever mourned.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

1 posted 2001-11-25 11:56 PM

wonderfully written, harpo.... nice to see you

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2001-11-26 07:46 AM

Another outrageously superb write,
"Please," I whisper. "Please." I beg.
"Serve me on a silver tray.
I was born to die this way.
Pour your honey over me--
I will risk the buzzing bee.
I will take the burn of sting
and in my pain I'll learn to sing..."
WOW
Sandra

I took a walk around the world to ease my troubled mind-I left my body lying somewhere in the sands of time. (3 Doors Down)

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-11-26 08:36 AM

Outstanding, Serenity... You are one of the good ones...

This was worded so very well. You did a fantastic job of describing the events, the feelings, and the nature of the love in a clean and delicate manner.
Kudos to you, as usual. And nice to read from you again.
~Allan

"I've never been intimidated by a piece of electronic equipment because I believe that man himself is the best piece of electronic equipment ever."
~Vangelis

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 11-26-2001).]

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-11-26 08:43 AM

Serenity,
Well done, nice write, enjoyed. *L*

SEA

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with you

5 posted 2001-11-26 11:12 AM

my goodness...whew...

I love love love this!! I'm keeping it too!

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

6 posted 2001-11-26 07:51 PM

Came back to reply. I read this at work and it really blew me away. But I got called away and didn't get a chance to reply..I love this!!!!!!

SpitFire
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7 posted 2001-11-26 08:16 PM

~There's something about the birthing word that stirs me. In a good way, I think. It just sounds so, elegant, or something, or rolling, or creative somehow, I don't know. But things everywhere and nowhere do this. And I think sometimes, it's beautiful. - You K, always are. A treat to read your words tonight. And always. I treasure what you write, although I rarely share that I do, to you. *Peace.

*I just reread this,...and I make no sense, I mean, _I_ know what it is I'm trying to say but. hh.

Midnitesun

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Gaia

8 posted 2001-11-26 08:22 PM

And you depict this birthing event so well, with such feeling and joie de vivre.

Janet Marie
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9 posted 2001-11-26 08:24 PM

You 'ground' me and yet
give me wing.
No confinement
in your arms
Your eyes
a promise
of no harm
your fingers
invoke god-like charm
there's no one else I'd rather be,
for you bring out the best in me.
=======================================

can a moth ask for more than this?

rhyme divine baby...
and look? me puter like me for a minute or two

missed reading your rhymes me twin...
get that new house WIRED

he said ... "dont cry" ...
said "it only hurts forever ... and all we have is time."

~Tabitha's Secret~

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

10 posted 2001-11-26 08:24 PM

Karen!! WOW!! That's about all I can manage at this point...fantastic!! WOW!! I'm going back for another read and then pop it into my library! ~hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2001-11-26 10:46 PM

You have this way of making me cover my eyes once in awhile LOL, and this was almost one of those times. This was sooooo good Karen, and into my library it goes to read when no one is watching LOL. Just kidding you wrote this sequence with such finesse, yes you did!

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

serenity blaze
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12 posted 2001-11-27 09:13 AM

Hey Lucy---it's good to be back. Love my blue pages!

missed you too!

Sandra! Hey lady---I'll write you later, but wanted to thank you for reading! We'll try that duet soon!

Allan, you are the sweetest thing and so talented too. A compliment from you is a high honor to me!

Thank you!

Sy...it's always my pleasure to please you!

Sue--Ya flatter me girl! Thanks for doing so too!

Sharon--my sis, I have missed you! (And I've got some prose reading to do, too!

)

Miss A--You know what frightens me---when people think they make no sense? I understand them perfectly. I think I'm in the wrong world sometimes! Thanks for letting me know. I was beginning to think that everyone was as bored with me as I am.

Midnitesun--I should birth the blues well by now, sometimes I wish I could just shut me off and be like those people that seemingly feel nothing. sigh...but thank you.

Janet....the house is wired...but still alot of work to do there. I'll write you with the details, but it's nerve wracking business, but methinks I've got the neighbors "broken" in already (which means they've decided to leave me the hell alone, heh heh

) Write ya later!

Nancy--didn't mean to leave ya hanging there with that e mail, but had to run! Spent the last two days hugging the couch too...(I LOVE my couch! sigh...) Thanks sister sorceress!

Mysteria! LMAO...I make you cover your eyes?
How the hell are ya reading then? And my goodness, you should follow me around through a carnival sometime! *shaking my head* THIS IS SERENITY BEING GOOD....ROFL...
Love ya, lady!

Thanks and love to all, good to be home.

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