My first tanka, inspired by Mistletoe Angel

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RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

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0 posted 2001-11-24 07:53 PM

A pretty flower
Swaying peacefully through breeze
Reminds me of you
And the color change of leaves
I'm a bare tree without you

Mistletoe Angel

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1 posted 2001-11-24 07:58 PM

(tears fall down my cheeks) OH MY GOSH, THIS IS SOOOOOOO BEAUTIFUL, I'M SO HONORED I CAN INSPIRE YOU TO WRITE THIS MARVELOUS FIRST TANKA!!! I LOVE IT!!! OH MY GOSH, THANK YOU, THANK YOU, I AM SPEECHLESS!!! (kiss on lips) I LOVE YOU!!! You to me are always the angel that sings in my dreams and the sunshine in every day, and the rainbows that cast on every rainy day, and the snowflakes that kiss my face! (smiles) I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on lips) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Joanna, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Midnitesun

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Gaia

2 posted 2001-11-24 08:01 PM

How delightful! I'm glad you said bare tree and not berry tree....that would have messed up the rhyme, not to mention the visuals, not to mention berries are usually on bushes, though some do grow on trees. LOL

Sorry, just being my usual looney tunes self.

PoetriPrincess
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3 posted 2001-11-24 08:03 PM

I agree this is very beautiful.,

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Enchantress
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Canada eh.

4 posted 2001-11-24 08:05 PM

Lovely...just lovely! ~hugs, Nancy~

~Life may not be the song you requested,
But as long as you're here you might as well dance~

RosePetal

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5 posted 2001-11-24 08:05 PM

LOL berry tree hehe...I wanted to say leafless tree but it messed up the syllable pattern so I said hmmm bare tree!!! LoL

Thank you PoetriPrincess : )

Balladeer

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6 posted 2001-11-24 08:26 PM

Something tells me Noah really likes it...and so do I!

Tracey
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where insanity meets breeding

7 posted 2001-11-24 09:05 PM

A beautiful tanka, inspired by a beautiful guy. Very pretty Joanna. Both of you are inspiring each other very prettily tonight

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

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Tennessee

8 posted 2001-11-25 09:09 AM

Isn't he just the most inspiring soul? And how great you've written your verse. Really beautiful brevity. Perfectly written in love.

Sincerely,
Regina

It's all in the mind
Except for what's in the heart.
http://www.mygem.net/heartquill

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

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South Florida

9 posted 2001-11-25 01:31 PM

Thank you : )

Balladeer: I love getting feedback from you, for you are one of the finest poets I know

Tracey: Thank you sweetie. Glad you enjoyed, this was my first attempt at a tanka, had fun writing it!

rwood: Hi beautiful! Thanks for reading and replying. Yeahhhh Noah is quite an inspiration, very supportive and kind!
: )

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