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wornways Member
since 2001-10-18
Posts 204CA, USA |
singular affect no one ever ran after me as you did no one ever gazed upon me as you did no one ever spake unto me as you did no one ever cried before me as you did no one ever opened to me as you did no one ever accepted me as you did no one ever embosomed me as you did no one ever melted my heart as you did no one ever reached into me as you did no one ever wrought such healing within me [This message has been edited by wornways (edited 11-25-2001).] |
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wornways Member
since 2001-10-18
Posts 204CA, USA |
author's note: i don't know if this style has a name. but, i used this style to write "vacuum" as well. it's a style i plan on using on and off in my writing. if anyone knows of a name for this style of writing, i'd appreciate a note from you. the specifics of this style as i've invented it are: 1) no limmit on the number of stanza's 2) each stanza written with four lines 3) each stanza is structured exactly the same (sylabols per line), but this structure is independent to each poem 5) one line changes in each stanza throughout the poem, it is always the same line 6) in the last stanza two lines change, the same line as throughout the poem, and another [This message has been edited by wornways (edited 11-24-2001).] |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I know nothing about the style. But I love this piece. Great thoughts and feelings in it. Speaks of one who has truly found love and the peace and happiness that love brings. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Whatever the style is I enjoyed it. I love the repetitive nature here, and it leaves me feeling as if you could be talking about God or about someone you love...or a friend. ~I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU!~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I also don't know if this style has a name or not but it is very effective. Well done! |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
I liked the piece very much too, it was an eye catching style ... very readable and carried a message No one ever listened themselves into trouble. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
there might be a name for this yes. . . but, if there isn't, what would you name it?? I like the repeating lines here as well, gives it an insistent quality. . . (*note: you might want to look at stanza 5*)  ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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wornways Member
since 2001-10-18
Posts 204CA, USA |
Sven: if i gave a name to this style, i suppose i might use the title of this poem as the style name. reason being, each stanza is affected singularly on a singular line, and the poem as a whole has a singular affect in another line in the final stanza. i knew the title of this piece before i began writing it, and i actualy approached the style based on the title as well as what i wished to say. then, i realized i quite liked the style and wanted to use it more. i do this a lot, invent styles then want to find out if it already exists or if i actually invented something. lol. seems like this one might be a real invention. maybe someday i'll invent something as well like as the villanelle.  all else, thank you for your comments and thoughts. quite enjoyed. |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
How about the term Svem used .... Insistant ?? No one ever listened themselves into trouble. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!!! I love it. I flowed right through it feeling all the while the powerful affect this person had on you. Magnificent writing with a new and unique style. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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