Life Lessons In Alliteration

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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-12-29 06:24 AM

Wondrous wandering
waves~~~awash~~~
a hungry wanting
tide for beach...

Ponderous pandering
paves---proceed---
a hungry tide
eats at the beach...

Alliteration,
most mundane,
each day different?
words the same
written roads
a finger's hand--
washed away
with bits of land
terra firma
not eternal
slipping grains of sand
through FIST.

* * *

I held a dream
in the palm of my hand.
I held it too tight.
It turned into sand.
All I had left
was the sand and the sweat,
that slipped through my fingers,
leaving only regrets.

[This message has been edited by serenity (12-29-2001 07:01 AM).]

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2001-12-29 07:07 AM

Karen,
loved the images and the alliteration.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-12-29 09:59 AM

Alliteration,
most mundane,
each day different?
words the same
written roads
a finger's hand--
washed away
with bits of land
terra firma
not eternal
slipping grains of sand
through FIST
=========================
I held a dream
in the palm of my hand.
I held it too tight.
It turned into sand.
All I had left
was the sand and the sweat,
that slipped through my fingers,
leaving only regrets.
========================================

*sigh* mirror mirror on the wall....

somehow wrapping lifes lessons in rhyme makes it seem easier to take the bitter pill.
groovy alliterations me twin...and employ of metaphor.
if we hold the dream tight enough...wont that sand turn into a diamond

me

When your own emptiness is all thats getting through
there comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking...
I passed that point long ago

craigrk
Member

since 2001-12-23

Posts 123

3 posted 2001-12-29 10:05 AM

Ebbs and tides. neat read and reread. thanks.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2001-12-29 11:15 AM

(sigh) Sometimes the course of life repeats itself, but there will come a love always that will turn tears into laughs and bring joy to the heart forever! (kiss on cheek) So well said, sweet friend, we all love you so very much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!

May love and liught always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2001-12-29 02:12 PM

I have to say, the last one is the one for me. Wow. Just perfect, and just how I feel, as always.
Sandra

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2001-12-29 02:20 PM

I held a dream
in the palm of my hand.
I held it too tight.
It turned into sand.
All I had left
was the sand and the sweat,
that slipped through my fingers,
leaving only regrets.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
This is an incredible write Karen!
Enjoyed this so much today.
~hugs, Nancy~

*~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~*

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2001-12-30 02:57 AM

Serenity-
  Very cool write, my friend.
  This likes me VERY much!
  Hugs,
  ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

peaches73533
Senior Member

since 2001-11-04

Posts 981
OK, USA

8 posted 2001-12-30 03:12 AM

Very awesome write and wonderful imagery.
Peaches

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