When Sunlight Falls (Marges Challenge #5)

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Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

0 posted 2001-12-08 10:20 PM

When Sunlight Falls
By: Noah Eaton
12/8/01

When sunlight falls
Kiss my lips so I can wake
Beside you and look into your lovely eyes
Watching the silver light balm your flesh in the daybreak

Your heart is sweet as a chocolate cherry
The sweetness you bring to my honeyed mouth
The sweetest pang is what your golden hair reflects
Shining as you make love to me, from your heart all the heavens on earth pour out

On dismal days when the sun is fish-netted in gray velvet
I can hear you orchestrate the rain, angel tears fall, silk pearls of white
As our lips embrace, you carry me over the rainbows arch
Into the turquoise glass house in the womb of the sunshine

When sunlight falls
Sail away with me into paradise
Upon these tangerine sundae Tom duBois canvas horizons
Melt with me as our eternal hidden sun will rise

When sunlight falls
Console my yearning sensitive spirit
In your loving arms I find happiness and solace
Like swans, let us leaven on eternity’s abyss

Let us love…ever after…

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (edited 12-08-2001).]

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

1 posted 2001-12-08 10:23 PM

ooohhhhh soooo gorgeous! my fav line was
"Your heart is sweet as a chocolate cherry"
mmm mmmmm...you are so talented my love!

love,
Joanna

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2001-12-08 10:30 PM

BRAVO!!!A very tasty treat is this poem, Noah. Very well done. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

3 posted 2001-12-08 10:37 PM

And you called me romantic...this is a treat of romance indeed!!!! Very nice Noah!!!!!

Bridgette

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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

4 posted 2001-12-08 10:38 PM

Ah sweet Noah! Another tasty treat and Marge's challenge well met too!
~Hugs, Nancy!

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

5 posted 2001-12-08 10:42 PM

You have me with leaven in
"Like swans, let us leaven on eternity’s abyss". I had to look it up good job of writing for the heat was there to read on.

Hypnosis
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since 2001-12-02

Posts 325
CO

6 posted 2001-12-09 02:47 AM

The taste of love is a taste you will never forget Noah!  Tastes good, doesn't it?  Good write buddy.

    From your good friend
         Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

7 posted 2001-12-09 08:27 AM

Noah,
Loved it, all the imagery was perfect except the last line somehow eternity's abyss didn't fit with the sweet image you painted. But it did not detract from the pioem.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

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lost in blue pages

8 posted 2001-12-09 10:53 AM

ahhhh Noah, how beautiful penned.....lovely gem that shows your loving heart very well.

((Hugs))
Charisma

~*Theresia~*

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2001-12-10 06:44 AM

Noah~
Just lovely`
Thank you for sharing your heart~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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