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Marge Challenge: How Long Did It Take You To Get That Ugly?
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Marge Challenge: How Long Did It Take You To Get That Ugly? |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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all is so faded, discoloured in a rusted metal a coat so jaded-- my skin is wearing off my fight is a losing battle pawned and waged for a lost cause-- and I am being spawned out of hurt drudging distress images disturb me when my mind opens its blind third eye the truth is out there the truth is so vague the truth is so sharp the fact -- confusing I am that confused cousin of vagrant thoughts who plods on old trail in search of the greater unknown ever unknown and my fight is a losing battle then why do I fight don't ask me why I write because I have no answer my shadow has no colour and my lines have no fervour and yet I draw these knots and crosses ever so furiously and then the length of this spiral is going to be overwhelming and I know few eyes may read the end of this but should I be concerned? why do I write? if for nothing but to seek some most wanted eyes to go over the monotonous scribe and I thought I could write for YOU! no wonder you left me with pity trotting around the walls around my garden of darkening secrets where woodpeckers of memories tear into my body, drawing venom spill by spill oh! I am so thankful to these peckers for they will help me in the long run to wage my battle by atleast making me unremember the glorious past when you and me were more than subjects of a photograph of a long walk down the beach leaving prints in the sand only to be swept away and now I realise slowly as the peckers peck away that passion had left a long time ago and love followed the exit of physics since unseen was the chemistry of bonding no astronomical barometers either those days may have been great but today, when you see my face, even your shadow seem to ask me 'how long did it take you to get that ugly?' in definite rhetoric fully knowing the answer 'not that long, surely not a life time' and you had pledged a Love forever no wonder, my fight is a losing battle and I am at my wits end like a candle burning at both ends with the peckers pecking away at one and images of you that are throwing stones of hurt at the other I am pawned and I am waged I am pinched and I am aged (and sometimes enraged) like a rusting metal losing its coat to being jaded timelessness seems to be hanging like a cruel joke in the haunting rhetoric of that singed query 'how long did it take you to get that ugly?' .... sorry to be the negative person of the day, but I sit on the hinges of a door, sometimes looking towards the bright out side, sometimes looking at the dark inside... or was it the other way around?  Thanks a lot for reading this monolith monologue... [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 12-04-2001).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Unbelievable. Just outstandingly creative, Sudhir! How many shades of green envy am I?Too many to count after reading this one. This is an awesome write. But standing on hinges has to be quite painful!   BRAVO!!![This message has been edited by Midnitesun (edited 12-04-2001).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, It could have taken a lifetime and you would still show the beauty of your soul. Lovely monolgue. Kethry. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ From the depths ... simply a poignant piece of writing~ 'I am that confused cousin of vagrant thoughts who plods on old trail in search of the greater unknown ever unknown' Thank you friend for letting your thoughts flow so others can share~ *Hugs* ... BIG HUGS~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Glenn Logan Member
since 2001-10-10
Posts 111Virginia |
A very interesting piece of writing, with a lot of fine lines. Yes, there is good reason for you to keep writing! Best wishes, Glenn Logan |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you my friends for reading the length of this one... midnitesun... I thank you very much for coming by to read almost all, if not all of what I write... your kindness is much appreciated... O Kethry, your sweet words overwhelm me... thank you... Marge, *HUGE HUGS* to you too, my dear friend... and thanks for so many things... Glenn, thanks for the words of support... sometimes I do doubt if I should continue to write or not... so far I've just continued... Regards to all, Sudhir |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
   A SUPERB WRITE, SUDHIR!!!you really did a marvelous job on the challenge, powerful, very powerful! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
GREAT WRITE, my friend. As for continuing to write - it's not a matter of whether you should or not but whether you WANT TO or NOT. Writings not something you should or shouldn't do (unless that's the way you make your living, of course), rather its a need, a pleasure, something you're driven to do. And to tell you the truth, I believe you want to and I think you should! Your decision though... jwesley |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
thank you very much, my friend, Virginia... jwesley, thank you too for coming by and leaving behind, your well-thought advice... Regards to all, sudhir |
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