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7 times 6 with 6 blanks and 1 smile...
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7 times 6 with 6 blanks and 1 smile... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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the woman of my life is holding my hands in warm embrace, with her body next to mine balanced on my couch with eyes closed and lips pouting, with soft whispers of sweet nothings and delicate strokes of caress and i slowly move, timing my shift, nearing her lips, in sensual slow-motion moving and i see stars all around me and traffic lights all sparkling-- red and round, no greens i realised -- that i lost my balance and fell over, from the edge of the couch, rubbing my eyes open and round i realised -- also in that sudden of happen that the woman of my life is non-existent just an invention of my lonely life, just like this 'hot air' scribbled above!  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hey! Where's the "what for" of this poem below? I need that!! And I like this! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh, but I understand the longing Sudhir! I am a lonely couch bunny too...altho I don't recall falling off of the couch, I do have tendency to fall out of bed. (sounds odd, but it makes blushing good sense when ya think about it!) Sweet write! Enjoyed much! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, the "what for" is avoided because I had to fit the title with the poem... 7 of 6 lines with 6 blank lines and 1 smile.. here is the "what for?" I dozed off my couch last night watching some tv series, at 'as I recollect' a point where the leading characters were just about to enjoy a kiss... and when I woke up I had to conjure something about that 'whole' episode... Hey serene one... it is such a great pleasure to read your name here... Thanks a lot for coming by, my friends smiles and regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 11-29-2001).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Capture the hot air and it will take you to the clouds. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*grin* I just had to laugh when you fell off the couch...it sure seems sometimes that our dreams are real. I hope yours come true sometime soon. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
dream her there...... one day she will be there get back up on the couch.... close your eyes.... it is in the imagining and dreaming and reaching out from the very essence of your dreams that will show in every word and action and she will notice..... and find you some great lines in this one sudhir! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I enjoyed this one Sudhir. Made me smile, it did! ~hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL at this one. I have an air chair. I leaned over to reach my pen and paper one day to write a "brilliant" thought before it could escape. And the chair rolled over sideways with me still sitting in it/ LOL, and to make it worse, I lost my train of thought and never wrote down that moment of brilliance. Thanks for the laugh. Hope she shows up in living technicolor, complete with a big green light. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I like your math and your piece! Well done! Midnitesun did not mention that her "air" chair is nessary to keep afloat among the ice flow Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all so much for all your kind visits and much appreciated responses to 7 times 6 with 6 blanks and 1 smile... Regards to all, sudhir |
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