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A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

0 posted 2001-10-03 04:37 PM

As coal surrenders itself
to a diamond
I ask for the surrender
of your heart to mine
May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

[This message has been edited by A Whisper's Caress (edited 10-04-2001).]

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

1 posted 2001-10-03 07:28 PM

oh, I love this. . . really. . .

it reminds me so much of Peter McWilliams. . . if you've never read him, you should. . . this is his style. . . short and profound. . .

great job. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

cpalmer
Senior Member

since 2001-06-26

Posts 977
Phoenix, Az

2 posted 2001-10-03 08:22 PM

This is lovely....hope he calls!

Cindi

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2001-10-03 08:25 PM

I love this style of writing...and I too hope he calls. ~Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

4 posted 2001-10-03 09:18 PM

thank you all for the generous responses.

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

5 posted 2001-10-04 01:27 AM

The surrender of base to precious.
If I had a white flag, I'd wave it.

As you may have noticed, I prefer this type of poetry, myself. I love reading an infinite moment in just a few words.

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

6 posted 2001-10-04 10:17 AM

Duncan,
you are very sweet. And yes, I have noticed. And have become quite fond of your style. You have a beautiful gift.

Poetic verse placed in the sadness of my heart
mask the sweet yearnings of my soul

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

7 posted 2001-10-04 03:06 PM

I love this one Annie...very lovely..hugss

~Victoria~

Twilight Myst
Member

since 2001-10-04

Posts 58
Just A Myst At Twilight

8 posted 2001-10-04 03:12 PM

*sigh*

Simply lovely...

paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

9 posted 2001-10-04 06:43 PM

A diamond is just a lump of coal that has been under a lot of pressure.

paladin

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