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Open Poetry #16

extreme conditions

7
Member

since 2000-04-26

Posts 113
Amherst, MA, USA

0 posted 2001-09-19 08:23 PM

stand in the rain
drown in false pain
hear sirens and wonder
can't the rain put out the fire?
the victim needs fuel
not a villain but a tool
alarm clock thunder
to mute would-be desire
whine through illusions of prison gates
dream of a dreadful state
to replace this unfortunate life
of perfection and love
imagine that pain will unleash
what whispers beneath the peace
for beauty must live in strife
and the drama beheld above
poor uncherished muse!
YOU are the one who can choose
will the rain put out the fire
or will the fire put out the rain?

no i will NOT wait three seconds!

Alan
Senior Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

1 posted 2001-09-19 09:59 PM

7....I enjoyed this a lot. good writing..
alan

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2001-09-19 11:34 PM

Very much enjoyed this....excellent write.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

3 posted 2001-09-23 04:28 PM

very nice write, 7.. enjoyed..

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

so many things i want to say to him..but i just placed a rose on his grave, and talked to the wind...
-tim mcgraw

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-09-23 08:37 PM

well done. . .

I love the polar opposites here. . .

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rascalx
Senior Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA

5 posted 2001-09-23 09:41 PM

"will the rain put out the fire
or will the fire put out the rain?"

I like this... a lot of thought went into this writing and a lot of us will think on it. Well done

- Jeff

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