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Ain't It Fun
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Ain't It Fun |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
The smell of grass fills the air, thoughts of days without care. Hay in bales to load on trucks, can’t stop now or be out of luck. Muscles strain against browned skin, as we lift again and again. No such thing as home by five, daylight to dark for job to survive. Sweat pours off under boiling sun, when some fool said, ain’t this fun. He must have known what I didn’t then, for he was so old it was a living sin. Looking back down all those years, I thought of that old man with some tears. For yes, it was fun, on looking back, pitting self against a moving stack. He had put it in words for all to see, we were living life in a land of free. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Logan, I remember my dad telling me of his teen days of walking to work, working all day on a farm, and getting just enough to put some gas in the car and to take my mom out..... I love it when they tell stories like that  This made me think of that.......thank you, this is wonderful |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dear gentle Logan..the storyteller of storytellers. This is very well done and quite a vivid image was quickly painted in my mind. And, lets not forget. "He had put it in words for all to see, we were living life in a land of free." Enjoyed lovable Logan. ~Hugs, Nancy Lee~
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He must have known what I didn’t then, for he was so old it was a living sin. ======================================= Hard to believe there was a time when you weren't wise  very cool poem sweet keeper... your cadence had be pickin' and a grinin... and hey.... there aint nothing like tanned, glistening muscles for imagery WOOHOO ROFL  We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Logan--The looking back makes a time like this very special..for sometimes we don't appreciate what we are doing at the time we are doing it. We should. Thank you for sharing this special memory and hugs for being so special yourself! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ah, Logan. You have such a great way of putting life's everyday blood, sweat and tears in perspective. The physical endurance of an uncomplicated task, the sweet sweat of labor in the sun. I've loaded bales of straw, fed chickens and hogs, weeded gardens and shoveled manure, picked cotton as well as oranges and peas, managed a networked computer lab, and edited technical engineering documents. And I always left the fields and gardens with a greater sense of accomplishment and peace than any office or school job. Thanks for reminding me how good it feels to do the physical tasks. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
fun can be so fun, my friend, with bales and bales of hey again, and more hellos piled on the bed of pick up trucks, as Time has fled.... remembering the eras, whens, survival, unity, the friends so sweetly joined in labor of a purpose, can define the Love which all of us must have, entwined, our hearts in blood on contracts signed the memories of seeing eyes are far from blind, but oh so wise and looking back brings view toward ------------ geez...... you inspired me.... thank YOU!! coming back to edit to finally say i thought your pome was kickin'!! great write here!! thanks for the read and i hope it was ok that i tagged onto it because damn...!!! somehow i can't help it when the muse comes and you inspired it to come out, no matter how lame what i wrote was... your poem.......... was heartfelt and i liked it very much!!!!! thank you the future which we must afford!! [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 09-30-2001).] |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
SEA, I am glad I brought some good memories back to you. It was a different time. Your dad and I could probably shared a can of peaches on a hot day and told many a story together..thank you for your read..very gentle smile Ahh, Nancy Lee, I am glad you could see where it was..thank you for your comments and read..very gentle smile Janet Marie, naw, I was a dumb kid LOL, but strong, so they kept me on the lifting more than the raking...glad you liked..and thanks for being here...very gentle smile Ahh, Martie, very gentle smile, too often we don't appreciate what we are basicly learning, which will carry us forward in our lifes..Thank you for being here and appreciate the hugs Midnitesun, yes, it does seem more satisfying at the end of the day, doesn't it? Thank you for being here, and for your so nice comments..very gentle smile Ahh, Doreen, then if I inspired you, you have made my day. and thank you for such kind words..and the poem you tacked on,,enjoyed...very gentle smile |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well heck, I can still smell hay! That must mean this was a darn descriptive poem and I loved it. (went for a hayride once) but that is another story ~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Logan Such a wonderful piece you have penned here with such excellent imagery. Take care...Sue Suetang |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
to do that, which is a choice to you, or say this, to voice a view happens to only very few except in the land of the free it happens here, where blue takes clue white lends right, considered our due where red was spilt, 'tis very true here, in the land of the free... [a few extra lines of inspired...] Thank you. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 09-30-2001).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Logan, it sounds like a hard life, but in retrospect, you can see the freedom of it as well. Good write, you can feel the hot sun beating down on the men as they work. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Indeed, a powerful description, Sir, but I also detected another side to this -- a subtle sense of irony in the sin of physical labor for an elderly man in "the land of the free"... This left me pondering... -MVS "Learn to let go of fear, doubt, and disbelief..." --THE MATRIX |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Mysteria, I am glad to bring back memories, but,ahhh, no, I won't ask about that hayride either...thank you for being here..very gentle smile Sue, very gentle smile, thank you for your kind words, they always are important to me.. Sis, I am more than pleased for you to add, for it always makes the poem sweeter. Glad for the inspire..very gentle smile Ahh, Sandra, all life is hard at times, it is how we use it that counts..Thank you for being here and sharing...very gentle smile Hey, Mark, always glad to see you here, and thank you for your words as usual..Always feel I have accomplished something if I can leave you pondering...gentle smile |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very much enjoyed your nostalgic look back in this piece Logan ... wonderfully descriptive, nicely written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*sigh* You make me smile, Sweet One, with your memories. This is just wonderful. Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Thanks for sharing this one, Logan. Brings back some wonderful memories of watching my uncle and my dad at my uncle's farm working in the fields. Sigh. All writing comes |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Logan, Beautiful poem, many memories. Thank you for sharing. Very nice to meet you also. Warm smiles, ~Marie~ |
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