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rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

0 posted 2001-09-25 09:26 PM

What makes the Horse rise and fall
In eternal race with the ones ahead
How the glittering dreams crash
Into a dizzy spell of enchantment
Wildly hanging on in merry glances
The piped music grows on you
Making you ride as if you belong
The smiles widen and eyes glimmer
And everything seems perfect, beautiful
Even if there may be one bulb out
Here and there among the fanciful
It goes unnoticed in the slow motion
Thrill of ridng with the pretend wind
Some do become ill. Some do not approve
Of such a whimsy of light fantastic
The artwork of the ride is ignored
Too childish, too silly, too much
For someone to understand
As they spin out of control
In a corner

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

1 posted 2001-09-25 09:45 PM

Wow - this is so well written! A powerful message, into my library this goes~

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

2 posted 2001-09-25 11:20 PM

I read this three times, I enjoyed it so much. The last two lines are really powerfull. Great write

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-09-26 01:07 AM

very cool...you wrote this so well with the imagery and the sounds...and the pace that you created...that you had the reader spining and hearing those piped songs.....
very clever and creative write
well done poetess RW

Well tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be
But in you I found a love so strong
The sun and the moon looked on in jealousy

Sinister Handed
Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 58

4 posted 2001-09-26 01:22 AM

Anyone else reminded of a Blue Magic song here?
Guess it was just me.

Well done! Nice imagery.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2001-09-26 01:41 AM

Really enjoyed your craft at work in this one, superb.

~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

6 posted 2001-09-26 01:59 AM

Ride on girly!

Great flow of words and imagery. I liked the originality of your metaphor.

Hugs,
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-09-26 06:20 AM

RWood~
I like the spinning of your thoughts~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

8 posted 2001-09-26 08:27 AM

As usual, Regina, your words have me enthralled. I love the metaphor, the pictures you paint, the whole piece.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

9 posted 2001-09-26 08:44 AM

Hey, my horse was always winning the race the rest trying to catch up. Enjoyed.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

10 posted 2001-09-26 09:08 AM

Richard said it before I could. I remember the days of the truly large and ornate "merry-go-rounds" and the brass rings for a free ride. Of course I was only a child and could not reach that far. Once stood on my hoss and was severly reprimanded by the operator but I told him I was a trick rider with lots of experience ... he didn't buy it

Well writ.

[This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 09-26-2001).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 2001-09-26 09:19 AM

I don't know which I enjoyed more, your lovely poems, or the wonderful comments! It's a toss up, give me a horse!

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

12 posted 2001-09-26 10:24 AM

Very nice, Regina, interesting way to approach this one. Remind me to refer you to a poem about painted horses that Spitfire did a while ago. I can't quite remember the name. You would enjoy it, I think. Similar theme, done slightly differently
Sandra

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

13 posted 2001-09-26 08:16 PM

Thank you all so much for taking a ride with me. Glad to see we can still jump on from time to time!

Hugs to everyone.

Sincerely,
Regina

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