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Kevin Taylor
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since 1999-12-23

Posts 185
near Vancouver, BC, Canada

0 posted 2001-10-26 10:20 PM

Well now, it was sometime in the fall of '98
Just 'round Thanksgivin' Day in the Land o' Freedom...
'er so they call it. Anyways, I was mining up behind them hills...
Y'know... nexta where God 'n Hell musta had some sorta fuss 'er 'nother.
Sorta desert. Sorta not.

An' I was pannin' fer rhymes - I kept comin' up dry -
when alluvasudden straight outta the ground
there's this tinklin', twinklin', musical sound.
So I eyeballed the pan and gave her a twitch.
Some verbs and an adjective peppered the dish.
Good stuff, I s'pose, fer a yarn they'd bin fine,
but not fer perfessional-lookers-fer-rhymes.
So I flipped 'em a toss and caught 'em agin
To see if that tinklin' mightn't be kin
to the one that I found t'other side o' that night.
It'd had t' be good, er it wouldn't fit right.
Them poets won't shell-out fer less than a pair
Cuz one by itself leaves 'em pullin' their hair.
So ya gotta find more than a couple that fit
Er poets 'll fake it 'n some 'll just quit
And some 'll just hope no one says that it's... Y' know...
Call 'emselves "nou-veau" and claim it's legit.
'Nuffa that, I s'pose.

I looks fer them twinklin' musical words that rhymes
like the first time they's ever bin heard.
I sure ain't the first one thats panned in them hills.
M' pappy before me turned up a few thrills
And somewhere or 'nother done found a whole line.
But me, I ain't happy 'nless it'll rhyme.
They're there, I c'n hear 'em just tickle the breeze!
I'll stick it out long 's there's poets t' please.
If ya 'spected a yarn, er t' hear miners cuss -
I's pannin' fer rhymes an' not dirt in the dust!

Hmph, what's 'at ya got there?

Kevin Taylor

[This message has been edited by kevintaylor (edited 10-26-2001).]

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

1 posted 2001-10-26 10:43 PM

Oh, this is so cute, I'm ROFLMAO. This sounds so familiar, and I love the way you put it. Brilliant, my hat is off to you!!

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Amused Cupid
Junior Member

since 2001-10-24

Posts 40

2 posted 2001-10-27 12:36 PM

This is great, and I agree with Tracy, love the way you put it together.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2001-11-01 02:27 PM

Kevin-
   I love the creativity of this piece.
   Wonderfully done!
   There's rhymes in them thar hills!! LOL!
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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