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Abigaile
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since 2001-10-21
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San Mateo, CA

0 posted 2001-10-26 01:24 PM


The land refreshes and gives life anew
Fills my soul with peace
Makes me feel pure like a
Young girl who has never seen
Or done wrong
Like pure mountain water
That gushes from above and
Cleanses my inner spirit
Back to nature
Back to the way she
Intended her world to be
Free from the progress
That man claims to have made
Free from the land of
Sorrow of a new day

"I am nae poet, in a sense;
But just a rhymer like by chance..."
-Robert Burns

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Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

1 posted 2001-10-26 01:26 PM


Free from the progress
That man claims to have made


Indeed true Abigaile.  Nice write.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2001-10-26 02:17 PM


Beautifully penned Abigaile...enjoyed, Nancy.

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Nightshade
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just out of reach
3 posted 2001-10-26 02:38 PM


Very well said Abigaile, I like this. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Rodney Belcher
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since 2000-06-06
Posts 227
Taylor, Michigan
4 posted 2001-10-26 02:40 PM


beautiful words & great imagery...thanks for sharing

Lets Love one another-let God do the worrying,
Rodney

[This message has been edited by Rodney Belcher (edited 10-26-2001).]

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2001-10-26 07:32 PM


Abigaile~

'Like pure mountain water
That gushes from above and
Cleanses my inner spirit'


Very effective use of simile~
Nicely said~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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