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Startime
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0 posted 2001-10-19 09:52 PM


BLUE FLAME

The sun blazes down baking all around
It's the middle of this world's summer
Rivers seem to vanish into the ground
Not leaving the slightest trace of vapour
Heat shimmers in the air of the desert
Radiating from the sands that glistens
Making even breathing a great effort
While straining to hear a breeze she listens
She sits proudly on her chestnut stallion
Gazing over the rolling hills of sand
Waiting the signal, calling to action
That she ride forth and protect her homeland
She feels the magic to which she holds claim
Glowing eyes and ancient sword called Blue Flame

Karen Torbiak 2001©

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

© Copyright 2001 Karen Torbiak - All Rights Reserved
walker
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1 posted 2001-10-19 09:54 PM


Really beautiful.
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2 posted 2001-10-19 09:56 PM


yes, this is beautiful!   It sounds like there should be more to this story?? I hope so  
Enchantress
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3 posted 2001-10-19 09:58 PM


Oh very very nice!!  Enjoyed.  Nancy.


  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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4 posted 2001-10-19 09:58 PM




BRAVO!!! Your enchanting words create such spellbinding tales of surreal hope and justice! (smiles) I remember writing FireQuest with you, this is wonderful! (big hugggssssss) Magic always fills your words, sweet Karen! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet star, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2001-10-19 11:20 PM


A beautiful poem it is.
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6 posted 2001-10-19 11:48 PM


This had better be 'Chapter 1' or you are teasing beyond reason . . .
I want to hear more about this woman.
      
  

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it."     Wendell Berry


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7 posted 2001-10-19 11:52 PM


Ready to romp the hills and conquer all.
Interesting and nice read Karen.   Thanx
for sharing it with us.

Larry C
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8 posted 2001-10-20 12:16 PM


Karen,
Is there room for another on that Blue Flame? What a ride and what a cause. Nice job.

Startime
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9 posted 2001-10-20 10:24 AM


Thanks, so much everyone. I am working on a follow up. I am so surprised that this was enjoyed. You have all made my day. Thank you, so very much.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

rwood
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10 posted 2001-10-21 09:31 AM


Wow!! This is very Joan of Arc/Braveheart! I loved it...yes go on.


Sincerely,
Regina

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11 posted 2001-10-21 09:35 AM



A passionate boldness from your "Blue Flame"

Willie B  

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