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wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 2001-10-12 12:57 PM

I wrote a book on life
And posted it online
And put a counter there
To see who'd all been where
And waited for response
And tried for nonchalance
Broke the F5 cancer
Waiting for an answer
If all my life was good
If someone understood
You know what all I got?
Replies came in a lot
But people got it wrong
Some music for this song
So they can hum along
Don't read my book instead
I write to read your head
It's how I live instead
Of being lonely…
Of being dead.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-10-12 01:46 PM

"Don't read my book instead
I write to read your head
It's how I live instead
Of being lonely…
Of being dead"

Walt, this is amazing

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2001-10-12 01:50 PM

this is soooo You, if you know what I mean...sometimes you get into someone's head..and get stuck there...at least for a spell. *s

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

3 posted 2001-10-12 01:55 PM

I agree with SEA, this ending is outstanding...great write!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-10-13 12:22 PM

hey. . .this is great walt. . .

can't wait to see it on the best-seller list. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

5 posted 2001-10-13 12:28 PM

well done!

enjoyed reading!

~Tier

elisaseyes
Member

since 1999-07-15

Posts 196
fort worth texas

6 posted 2001-10-13 11:36 AM

Lord, don't let him be misunderstood!

cruz
Member

since 2000-07-18

Posts 282
Dallas,Texas USA

7 posted 2001-10-13 10:28 PM

i like how this flows.
it put this quick beat in my head and its still going.

The following stanza is a cool thought, but is it true? Or is this just some kind of ploy? well written!!

Don't read my book instead
I write to read your head
It's how I live instead
Of being lonely…
Of being dead.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

8 posted 2001-10-13 10:36 PM

WOW!!!this is a powerful poem. You speak from the heart is a way that leaves me with my mouth open. Well done.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

9 posted 2001-10-13 10:43 PM

What a great write

Broke the F5 cancer
Waiting for an answer

Really like those two lines for some reason. They kinda sing.....like a blues tune

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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