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Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-10-09 07:47 AM

“What is the matter,
why do you batter that door on this store,
with your cane?”
Let me explain
To you,
“Please do”
The light was lit, when I came to it,
Burning brightly, so I tapped lightly.
“but it’s dark in there”
It was bright, I swear,
But darkened on my tapping,
And since I came to complain,
Decided in needed a firmer rapping,
And proceeded with my cane.
“Then it was you I heard shout,
so what is this all about”
Our boiler has gone out.
“I think I know who you are,
didn’t I, last month, ticket your car?”
Yes, down on River Road,
Eventually it was towed.
“The car made a terrible sound,
You had broken down,
In a no parking zone, if I remember”
It was a terrible September
“Since you were disturbing the peace,
someone called the police,
so, you better move along
back to where you belong”
so I do what I am told,
and go back to the dark and cold.

Gloom

[This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 10-09-2001).]

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2001-10-09 09:37 AM

aww...I like this tale of city life...

although it didn't end too well did it.

~Wynter enjoying the first frost...you should have seen the fog dancing on the top of the lake this morning..swirling and twirling ...

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2001-10-09 10:07 AM

Prof Gloom,
Well done enjoyed the read.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2001-10-09 01:10 PM

Thank you, Nakdthoughts,
I am pleased you liked my words.

Thank you, Seymour Tabin,
Glad you enjoyed.

Gloom

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-10-10 11:47 AM

Veeerry interestng write. I enjoyed the story. My eyes just flowed to the bottom of the page. Well done!

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

5 posted 2001-10-10 11:53 AM

Thank you, Interloper,
Pleased you liked the words and how they flowed,
After all, it just a minor event,
Scrambled into poetic form

Gloom

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

6 posted 2001-10-10 10:04 PM

Left wanting to know more about the man with the cane.... and his bad September LOL
~Connie~

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

7 posted 2001-10-10 10:48 PM

Very interesting style here. I enjoyed the way you told this story.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

8 posted 2001-10-11 09:27 AM

Thank you, Zinsser,
The man with the cane is the same as
The man in the shadows,
It’s my first person perspective.
Glad you enjoyed

Thank you, Tracey,
Every once in a while I like to do
A more open style, almost conversational,
Lighten the mood, such as I can.
I am pleased you liked this attempt.

Gloom

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