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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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. . . - - - . . - - + . ( ^? - - - . . . & . . . - - - + ) > . . . - - . . < . . . + + + - - - > > > ( ( ( - - - . . . ? ! ?! : !? ;* - - + . . . / - / . . / - / . . . . . - - - / - ? ! ? ------------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 07-26-2001).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now Sven...do I have to close this? Poetry, please! |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Ooops  , got a virus Sven?????I kinda like it though  Don't know what it says  , but it spoke to me  I think  I'm all  now.Titia  A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
ummm, Sven, did ya have too much to drink tonight hehehe |
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Snowdwen Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 75Louisiana |
I'm with Titia.. I like it. shows a eh shows something not sure.. but I think we all felt this way sometime or another!   To ya Sven!"You live you learn and life moves on" |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
10000001000001 01111 0000000100000 000011111111110 0000100101010101 01000000 001 11111100000000 0000011 11100000 0011100 0001000. I think that says it all!  All writing comes |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i think you call that morse code dont ya ha.. lets see.. i love you do you hear me i want to drown myself in the sea come lay with me im thinking im dying help help me please i cant swim i cant breathe haa... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hmmmm, this is very interesting Sven. let me start of by saying....I think that the second line is a little, umm, ok actually very very short. It seems to unbalance the form and style that you have chosen to be creative with. Allow me to suggest something like this perhaps... . . . - - - . . - - + . ( ^? + + + - - - > < - - - . . . & . . . - - - + ) > . . . - - . . < . . . + + + - - - > > > ( ( ( - - - . . . I beleive that structuring it like I have shown you above will stabalise the texture! IMHO of course! All in all, terrific work m'friend!  LOL! You crack me up. Hope you don't mind Sven, all in good humour of course and let me tell you, I do appreciate your suggestions for my poem.  Maree |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sven? don't you think //..//..// etc... just a teeny bit cliche?  |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
I really don't know what it is saying to me. Little green men are not coming out with any answers either. My imagination just drew a blank. Am I not on the right channel or wavelength?? |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Sven,...... Is this a new challenge?....... Well........I feel as if in a whirlwind trying to crack it up........ *************************** |
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wpwpoet Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 99 |
I think (critically speaking of course)that it needs to have more punctuation. but I could be wrong. what does eveyone else think.? |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
LOL First, I'd like to say that there really is no deep meaning to this one. . . it's just an "expirment". . . something to get you all to think outside of the "normal" boxes about what poetry is and what poetry isn't. . . something to get your minds going. . . now, I'm sure that most of you have seen these kinds of things in books about "modern" or "experimental" poetry. . . but, I thought that I'd just have some fun with it, and get you all to think a little fast on your feet. . . Sunshine, you don't have to close it my friend. . . just having some fun!! Titia, I'm glad that it spoke to you. . . I'm just wondering what language it spoke to you in! LOL Melissa, I can assure you that I did not have too much to drink last night. . . tonight however. . . LOLSnowdwen, I'm sure that we all have felt this way. . . thank you. . . LW, 001111 000001 0111001100 001111, 0110011001111. . .LOL Victoria, shhh!! You'll ruin it for the rest of them!! LOL DA, you may be really right about the second line. . . hmmmmmmmm. . . thank you my friend. . . your response was perfect!!! serenity, no I don't!! but, at least I didn't use #***/%%---++!! LOL Ariana, you're on the right channel. . .it's just that I made it fuzzy for everyone. . . Enchanted Melody, no, not a challenge per se. . . just a way to try to get you to think differently. . . thank you. . . wpwpoet. you could be right about that. . . got any suggestions?? ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
HA HA, the title drew me in Sandra |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Sven, I'm still figuring on that myself LOL Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ahh, hangman? Morse code? Fill in the blanks? Cor |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Sven, I am so glad you finally posted a reply! You had me worried that some of those little dudes from planet ork had taken over your body. You know the ones who carve patterns in fields in the dead of night...those guys. Whew! So glad we don't have to worry about losing the real Sven! Deb |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
- .... .. ... .. ... -. --- - -- --- .-. .... . -.-. --- -.. . .-.-.- But I like it. [This message has been edited by mirror man (edited 07-27-2001).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
you never cease to amuse me |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sven, As a ham radio operator who really DOES000000 know morse code I got a grin from this one, my friend. I'll teach you *real morse code* any time you're ready to learn. LOL Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Proves, I believe...that poetry is in the eye of the beholder. Good point, enjoyable way to make it! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sandra, it's not everyday that you see a title like that is it?? thank you. . . Cor, yes. . . LOL Deb, lol at your reply. . . living here in the city, I don't have much access to those fields, but I might try the park across the street. . . thanks. . . Mirror Man, ... -.- -. --- .--- .-.-.-, thank you. . . glad that you liked it. . . faterider, I've always got something up my sleeve don't I?? thank you my friend. . . Michael, I might be a while from that. . . but I'll let you know. . . thank you. . . JLR, you said it in a nutshell. . . thank you!!! -------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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wpwpoet Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 99 |
Sven , hey I think the third sixth and tenth lines need to be qoutes " " and mabey not end with a question but with this !?! or just this ?! it might seem fuller and more complete. I do plan to read it again and will give a little more if you do happen to like my suggestion and edit the post. wpwpoet. |
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